Talk:Sian Breckin/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 21:58, 16 July 2013 (UTC)

Shall review this one.

General

• A few dead links.
• One dab link which needs addressing.
• No problems with images either, as none are used.
• Newspaper sources need locations added. For publications where the location is given, I would advise you to remove them (ie: Cleveland Scene Weekly) for reasons obvious.
• Domains are not the same as publishers.

Lead

• "From 1993 to 1999, Breckin attended classes at the Roundhay School, and received GCE Advanced Level qualification in the field of drama.", although this is the qualification's correct title, I would suggest you use its colloquial name, amongst students, teachers and publication style guides in Britain – the A-Level. So the sentence would become '...recieved an A-Level in drama'.
• "Breckin had a recurring role as Deena Hardman on the 2012 television series Hollyoaks.", Hollyoaks is a recurring soap drama in Britain. How the sentence is worded may give the impression that it was a one-off series, first shown in 2012. You need to reword this, to state Breckin appeared in Hollyoaks in 2012.

Career

• Sky News is not italicised.
• Is it "Breckin guest-starred opposite series regular" "Breckin guest starred on the television drama..." -- hyphenated or not?

Shall pass once comments have been addressed. On hold until then. Lemonade51 (talk) 21:58, 16 July 2013 (UTC)

Thanks very much for the review, will get to addressing all above comments shortly, and post back here, — Cirt (talk) 02:47, 17 July 2013 (UTC)

Responses to GA Review

1. Trimmed or replaced the dead links.
2. Fixed the dab link.
3. Addressed this, checked to make sure cites satisfy WP:V and made sure there was no need for obvious and therefore redundant location info.
4. Removed domain names from publisher fields.
5. Changed sentence to " A-Level in drama".
6. Removed the hyphen in this case.
7. Thanks very much for these helpful recommendations, — Cirt (talk) 18:00, 19 July 2013 (UTC)

Happy to pass, nice work. Lemonade51 (talk) 22:32, 19 July 2013 (UTC)

Thanks very much! — Cirt (talk) 02:52, 20 July 2013 (UTC)