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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 17:55, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 17:55, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
Basic stuff and comments
edit- Try moving references in the lead to the body of the article.
- The references in the lead are there because the statements in it have been challenged before; I expect they would be again challenged if the references were removed. jp×g 20:12, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
- Add a serial comma after "e-girls".
- Done. jp×g 20:08, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
- Add a comma after the first use of "Too Short".
- Done. jp×g 20:08, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
- What could possibly help readers in describing "Mr. Simp Sexual"?
- The term is usually employed (at least in memes) alongside a sort of character vignette, whose description is otherwise lacking from the article. I chose this one since it's not just a random post, it's a post that is deliberately included as an exemplar of the archetype in an article from a reliable source. jp×g 20:12, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
- "described use of" → "described the use of"
- Done. jp×g 20:08, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
- Remove the comma after "written on it".
- This one I have a minor objection to, since the sentence is extremely long and has multiple clauses in it. I will still do it if you are totally certain that it should be that way. jp×g 20:07, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
- "time of announcement" → "time of the announcement"
- Done. jp×g 20:12, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
- References are already archived.
- Optional, but linking sources through "|website=" helps readers.
- You mean wikilinks? Sure, I'll take a stab at it. jp×g 20:13, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
- Done (linked on the first occurrence of the publication name in a reference, and in plain text afterwards. jp×g 20:16, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
- Oh, hell, the references don't appear in the same order as in the source code. I can try to fix that if you want. jp×g 20:17, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
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@Some Dude From North Carolina: Modifications have been made, what do you think? jp×g 20:18, 31 March 2021 (UTC)