Talk:Ska Against Racism Tour

Hi Group 2! Your article is coming together pretty well! What you have written so far is very clear, concise and seems to be in the proper academic tone for what is needed. Also your paper looks like it is well cited. I did notice, however, a few improvements that could be made. Aside from just elaborating more and adding more content to each section, I would recommend to have more of a variety of sources within each section. Some sections only use one source, but it would be more credible to include more sources from different points of view. Also, there seems to be a bit of alack of cohesiveness between sections. Some sections such as the "Lineup" section do not include a context or background of what a lineup was or how it related to your topic, which left me a bit confused. Overall, I think you guys are on the right track and that you will be able to strengthen your article and your content and elaboration progresses! Hannahhendricksen (talk) 20:58, 14 October 2016 (UTC)Hannah Hendricksen

Hey Group 2!! Your article is super fascinating. Your article is short and concise which is a great thing. I really liked how you linked different Wikipedia pages into your page. It made it a lot easier to understand what you were writing about when I could click on "ska" music style. I would suggest that you add a heading called "References and External Links" and put all your citations under that. I was a little confused when I saw your sources under "Line Up". I would also suggest maybe adding a couple of photos of the music festival or something along those lines. Also, you guys mention "Plea for Peace Foundation" at the end of your history section. I was a little confused by the random placement of that information and then the prompt ending of that section. I would suggest either adding a little more information about that foundation, maybe add a subheading or something, or not mentioning it at all. Keep up the great work. Your page is looking great, it was a privilege to be a small part in your editing and publishing process. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Siena.c.schroeder (talk • contribs) 18:26, 14 October 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I would like to say that your wikipage is really good. It is short and to the point and the information is really i teresting to read. keep up the good work and keep on doing what youre doing! Gabair18 (talk) 20:55, 14 October 2016 (UTC)Gisele Bair

Feedback

Nice start on your article draft. But I have a few concerns.

1. The subject of the article is the Ska Against Racism Tour, but of the ~610 words in the article, only ~325 words are actually about the tour. While a background section about ska is helpful to the reader, there's a whole article on the topic. Give your readers enough to orient themselves, and then point them towards the real article.
2. What you're left with, the material that's actually about the tour, is very thin. You need to talk about the tour more. Where did they go? How were they received? Did their message resonate? Where there any lasting impacts? That's the way you demonstrate the notability of the topic.
3. You need to improve your sourcing. Two of your sources are Google sites with no evidence of authorship, let alone any indication why they should be considered reliable sources. Similarly, you can't use a Wikipedia entry as a source. Of the others, while the Orlando Weekly and Miami New Times probably make the cut as reliable sources, they don't really have the sort of weight you'd need to demonstrate notability. The only source you have that goes toward demonstrating notability is the Sun-Sentinel. You need multiple sources of at least that caliber.
4. Given the early role of people like Eddie Seaga (Lebanese Jamaican) and Byron Lee (Chinese Jamaican) in the development of ska, I think your first sentence about the blackness of its origin needs more nuance, and a supporting source. The source you have doesn't actually support the claims you make in that sentence. When making sweeping claims about an entire country, you nee to be careful that you're working from a high-quality source.
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   Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:44, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Thank you everyone for all of your feedback! You have all helped so much in giving us pointers on how to improve our page. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Alexandria Maupin (talk • contribs) 18:16, 2 November 2016 (UTC)

Thank you Ian, we are working on making those changes! @Ian (Wiki Ed): Jnnfrsun (talk) 19:40, 3 November 2016 (UTC) Jennifer Sun