Talk:Skin Deep (Once Upon a Time)/GA1
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Reviewer: Gabriel Yuji (talk · contribs) 02:10, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
I'll give it a shot. It's horrible to see that people must wait for more than 3 months to have an article reviewed... (I know there is articles needing reviews since January, but...). The article is in a very good-shape in my opinion but I have minor concerns.
Some points that may need to be addressed (if you don't disagree, of course):
- I think the flow in the sentence "In this episode, ... horrors of the Ogre Wars" is a bit awkward. I suggest you to split it; maybe you can try something like "In this episode, there are three main storylines"... and then separate them with semicolons
- I've tweaked the chunk to appear in two sentences, and added a bit more punctuation. Ruby 2010/2013 02:18, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
- "Belle's fiancée Gaston (Sage Brocklebank) and" => "Belle's fiancée, Gaston (Sage Brocklebank), and"
- "he explains that it's a joke", "she can't believe", etc = WP:N'T
- You can remove the caps from the title of Give Me My Remote's source per MOS:ALLCAPS
- You link Gaston twice; "the animation [version of him]" and "Belle's fiancée in the show is named Gaston" = WP:OVERLINK
- "As well, in the background of the dining area in the "Beast's" home one can see a candlestick and a clock next to each other, referencing the characters of Lumière and Cogsworth." Which source is supporting this claim?
- I'm not sure so I've removed it from the section (it's something that existed in the article before I began editing it, and while I thought I had sourced or trimmed all previously uncited content, I must have missed that one). Ruby 2010/2013 02:18, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
- Why is Skin Deep in italic in the "Ratings" section?
- I just wonder why you chose to writing "sixteenth" instead of "16th" but preferred to write "12th" over "twelfth" (If my other observations are that not relevant this one is even less...)
- I've made it consistent and used "twelfth" (another relic of the previous state of the article). Ruby 2010/2013 02:18, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
Gabriel Yuji (talk) 02:10, 18 July 2014 (UTC)
- Thank you very much for taking this one on! I will address your comments shortly. Ruby 2010/2013 02:54, 22 July 2014 (UTC)
- I believe I have addressed all of your concerns! Please let me know if there is anything else. (Yes, the backlog is pretty awful! I wonder if another review drive will be held soon?) Ruby 2010/2013 02:18, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
- You're welcome. That's all. A GA-article now. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 03:54, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
Well, Ruby2010, only one last commentary, not about this GA. I've looked at other GAs of Once Upon a Time (btw, good job[!]) and, as in this one, The Heart Is a Lonely Hunter has written "In the Characters' Past", while Snow Falls, for example, is written "In the characters' past". I think it's a very, very minor aspect but shouldn't the series' episodes have some consistency on the use of caps. Cheers, Gabriel Yuji (talk) 04:04, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
- Good point. An IP editor will sometimes tweak the heading names, and I don't always have time to monitor it. I've gone ahead and made it lowercase in the Hunter article, as I agree consistency is key. Thanks for the observation! Ruby 2010/2013 04:12, 23 July 2014 (UTC)