Talk:Slap-Happy/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Retrohead (talk · contribs) 18:36, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

I'll review this as part of the GA cup.--Retrohead (talk) 18:36, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• You can add studio in the infobox.

Done --Niwi3 (talk) 22:44, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

It's not done correctly. The "recorded" parameter is used for date of recording, for example 10–20 April 1999. You have another parameter "studio" for the recording studio. See Template:Infobox album#Details.

Fixed --Niwi3 (talk) 21:57, 9 March 2016 (UTC)

• Do we know when bassist Gail Greenwood left the group? By the way, how is the bassist departure is related with Demetra Plakas being a longtime drummer?

According to this, she left the band before the recording of the album, but the exact date is unknown. It's probably sometime between late 1997 and early 1998, but we don't have a source so we cannot include that. --Niwi3 (talk) 22:44, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

• Do we know the exact budget in numbers? Relatively low is pretty variable term.

I'm afraid not. This album is quite obscure and I don't think there is any source with that. I removed the word "relatively", though. --Niwi3 (talk) 22:44, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

• What do you mean by relaxed songs? More ordinary lyrics, slower tempos, or something third?

Slow and guitar-driven, with an indie touch. The corresponding source describes it as "relaxed and varied", which I think are appropriate and very descriptive adjectives. --Niwi3 (talk) 22:44, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

There are people who consider thrash metal a relaxing music, and there are plenty of people who find punk albums (such as this) to be noise. Relaxed can't be written as a fact, but having slower tempos can be.

Replaced with "more varied and slower-paced songs". --Niwi3 (talk) 21:57, 9 March 2016 (UTC)

Background and recording

• Can you attribute the position of Gail Greenwood instead of calling him band member? If he is the bassist, describe Jennifer Finch as founding member.

Done. Greenwood is a woman BTW :) --Niwi3 (talk) 22:44, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

• By "geographical difficulties" you mean traveling issues, uncoordinated schedules, or something else? The current description doesn't read quite well.

As far as I know, the source does not specify what kind of geographical difficulties. --Niwi3 (talk) 22:44, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

My point was, by "geographical difficulties" someone might think it's the climate or something. You can interpret the source if you understand the context.

Replaced with "uncoordinated schedules" --Niwi3 (talk) 21:57, 9 March 2016 (UTC)

• Can you write it Slash Records and Reprise? When I first read Slash, I thought the GN'R guitarist released it.

Done --Niwi3 (talk) 21:57, 9 March 2016 (UTC)

• I would delete "for their fans". Every artist releases an album for fans to buy it.

Removed --Niwi3 (talk) 21:57, 9 March 2016 (UTC)

Other

• The prose in the remaining section seems fine. I'll might make a few edits on my own if I notice something that's easily fixable.
• I think it's safe, but it won't hurt to ask what kind of reference is Synthesis? Seems like a webzine, but I can't find other featured content on their website.

It is a website produced by the Synthesis Network. I noticed that there is a Wikipedia entry for it, so I wikilinked it. --Niwi3 (talk) 22:44, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

Ok, no problem.

Thank you for reviewing this article. I think I fixed most of the points you brought up. Please let me know if there is anything else that needs to be fixed. --Niwi3 (talk) 22:44, 8 March 2016 (UTC)