Talk:Smile (Lily Allen song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: --Legolas ^(talk2me) 09:09, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

Quick fail check

Links validity check

• Y per --Legolas ^(talk2me) 09:09, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

Check for disambiguation and other dubious wikilinks

• Y per --Legolas ^(talk2me) 09:09, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

• • Please correct the quick fail criteria, two days are alloted for it. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 09:09, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

• • • Passed quick fail. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 10:37, 13 January 2010 (UTC)

GA review

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   A number of times, online publications are italicized in the article. Like iTunes and BBC. Should be removed. Also, publisher is missing from a lot of the references. How to do that, for eg work=''[[BBC]]''|publisher=[[BBC Online]] should be the correct work and publisher parameters for BBC. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 10:37, 13 January 2010 (UTC)

   Done.

   I still see a lot of the work parameters for online sources italicized. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 04:43, 15 January 2010 (UTC)

   OK, done. Is it better now?

   References 10, 13, 38 needs correction + capitalisation + adding correct publisher. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 06:34, 18 January 2010 (UTC)

   Finally done!

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   File:Smilevideo.PNG fails WP:NFCC#8, its easily describable by words. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 10:37, 13 January 2010 (UTC)

   Correct the alternate text spelling mistakes in File:Smile CD 1.jpg and reduce it to 300x300 for passing NFCC#3b. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 10:37, 13 January 2010 (UTC)

   Corrected. However, I really don't know which screenshot would not fail #8. Would you please take a look at the video and give your opinion?

   The one where the bruised boyfriend and Allen goes to the coffee shop. And upload a .jpg extension file. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 04:43, 15 January 2010 (UTC)

   Replaced. The name is still "Smilevideo.PNG", but it's .jpg. --12345abcxyz20082009 (talk) 13:37, 17 January 2010 (UTC)

   Its fine now. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 06:34, 18 January 2010 (UTC)

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Seven days alloted for addressing the issues presented below. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 10:37, 13 January 2010 (UTC)

lead

1. Written by Allen, Iyiola Babalola and Darren Lewis in 2004, while sampling The Soul Brothers' "Free Soul", --> too long a sentence. Consider chopping up the snake --> The song samples The Soul Brothers' "Free Soul" and was written by Allen, Iyiola Babalola and Darren Lewis in 2004,
2. the song was released as the lead mainstream single of the album -> can work as independent sentence and give the release date at the end.
3. on the social network of MySpace --> on the social network website MySpace
4. Contemporary critics complimented the song, noticing the confidence it hides and the carnivalesque, yet melancholy, theme, although some considered it was not one of the album's best tracks and it makes the singer a "theoretical pop princess". --> chop the snake
5. also banned on MTV due --> was banned on MTV
6. It won, in 2008, a Pop Award --> In 2008, it won

Done.

background

1. various labes --> corr
2. In 2005, Allen was signed to Regal Records; the label gave her £25,000, --> In 2005, Allen was signed to Regal Records who gave her £25,000 to produce an album. Allen considered it to be a small "develop......
3. Her label, Regal --> we already know its her label

After that, they finally approved some of her songs, confident on the inclusion on the album; among the songs, that Allen claimed she was happy with, was "Smile". --> After that, they finally approved some of her songs, being confident of their inclusion on the album. "smile" was among the chosen songs, that Allen claimed she was happy with.

1. The first song I ever wrote was Smile --> put single quotes around Smile as it is already under "b".

Done

music

1. organ riff is a sample --> organ riff contains a sample
2. She and Clement Dodd received --> Allen and Clement Dodd

   Actually, the "she" refers to Jackie Mittoo.

3. Allen said she later regretted the direct approach of her lyrics: --> Next part should be a blockquote as it is comprised of more than three sentences

Done.

critical

1. fine section

commercial

1. Gold by the Recording Industry Association of America only --> why the only?
2. the ref no. 8 doesnot show Pop 100. Its dead now.

Corrected. It was Pop Songs, I confused it with Pop 100.

music video

1. She them meets with her bruised --> spelling
2. Allen commented in an interview that the video was banned on the music channel MTV in the United Kingdom --> After the video was banned on the music channel MTV in the UK, Allen commented regarding this in an inverview:

Done.

live

1. The second paragraph actually consists of cover versions of the song, it should be moved to a separate section titled covers and appearances

Separated.

tracklisting

1. you don't need to wikilink Maxi and EP

Unlinked.

credits

1. use ndash instead of mdashes

Done.

charts

1. remove componet chart hot digital songs and remove pop 100 as not supported by reference.
2. the sales and certifications table can also be removed as a single certifying body can easily be explained in the article text.

Removed

EL

1. remove the official site link as per WP:ELN as it doesnot contain direct knowledge of the song.
2. Categories. Rearrange.

Removed and rearranged categories alphabetically.

These are all the faults with the article + those mentioned in the GA list. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 10:37, 13 January 2010 (UTC)

Waiting for the quick fail passing. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 09:11, 11 January 2010 (UTC)

• I have replaced the dead link. Funny how it "died" the exact same date as this review started. I don't know what the link in blue is supposed to mean, the URL works for me and the page opens. --12345abcxyz20082009 (talk) 14:12, 12 January 2010 (UTC)
  • Ha ha. I know. It happened so many times with me. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 10:37, 13 January 2010 (UTC)
    • Almost there. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 06:34, 18 January 2010 (UTC)
      • Yup, it's been a long road. :) --12345abcxyz20082009 (talk) 13:17, 18 January 2010 (UTC)
        • Passed GA. Wonderful work. Should consider it for FA. --Legolas ^(talk2me) 13:21, 18 January 2010 (UTC)