Talk:So Close (Enchanted song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 12:38, 17 April 2019 (UTC)

Lead

• Link "Disney"

Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

• The lead is really well-written, nothing else I can complain about

Thanks a lot!!--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Infobox

• The "Recorded" parametre is not cited throughout the article's body

Can't find a source for this; removed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

• The "Genre" parametre doesn't need to be extra cited here as it's already in the article's body

Removed citation.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Writing and recording

• that this appears to be Giselle and Robert's final moment together → here, you kind of come out of the sudden with these names, and this may be confusing to people who hadn't read the lead before. I suggest something like: "that this appears to be Giselle and Robert's—the main characters in Enchanted (2007), the fantasy film "So Close" is featured on—final moment together"

I've revised the sentence to be more expository.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

• enjoyed but ultimately preferred the final version used in the film → enjoyed but ultimately rejected in favor of the final version used in the film

Sounds good. Replaced.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Context

• I have never seen a "Context" section before in any of the GANs I've reviewed in the past years, but this seems so genuine here, so go for it

Thank you! I think it helps with songs that originate within the narrative of a film.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

• and Nancy (Idina Menzel), his fiancé → and his fiancé Nancy (Idina Menzel) (to be more precise)

Revised.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Composition

• three minutes and forty-nine seconds (3:49). → the bit in brackets in unnecessary

I've seen it used in other song articles, but I've removed it.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

• Link "waltz"

Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

• describing the track as "A more contemporary → describing the track as "a more contemporary

Fixed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

• Link "d-flat"

Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

• beginning "You're in my arms → beginning with "You're in my arms

Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Reception

• writing "musical nitpickers → writing that "musical nitpickers

Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

• For more flow: Jared Johnson, writing for The Sojourn, described → Jared Johnson, writing for The Sojourn, conversely described

Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

• McLaughlin's most streamed song on Spotify.[33] As of January 2019, the song had been streamed on Spotify more than 16 million times → McLaughlin's most streamed song on Spotify,[33] with more than 16 million streams as of January 2019

Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Live perfromances and covers

• McLaughlin revealed that he was very nervous during the performance: "more nervous than I have ever been in my entire life." → this is kind of unnecessary; aren't all singers nervous prior to big performances? I suggest you remove this

Removed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

• "eponymous" is a more encyclopedic term for "self-titled"

Done.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

• Both singers' parents listened to the cover shortly after they recorded it and enjoyed it → This is also very redundant as their parents are not any sort of music critics

Removed.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Other things

• 33.3% is (still) a good copyviolation percentage
• No disambiguation links
• No dead links
• As far as I checked them, the references do support the assertions made in this article

Sweet!--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Outcome

•  On hold for 7 days — A very well-written article. Just a few changes and I'll be ready to pass this for GA. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:19, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

Thank you so much! I think I've addressed everything. Looking forward to your final verdict and comments Cartoon network freak.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:17, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

@Changedforbetter: Passing — Really great work that is deserving of GA status. Congrats! Is there any chance you could also review one of my GANs? Just disregard if you're too busy... Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 14:23, 18 April 2019 (UTC)

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