Talk:Sofía Espinosa/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ComputerJA (talk · contribs) 23:46, 4 March 2017 (UTC)

Review

Hello. I'll happily review this article. Just by doing a quick overview, I can tell the article is well-written, properly uses reliable sources, and conforms to the appropriate layout. I can read Spanish sources so this can help verify the information. My review will consist of 2 parts. On the first one, I will go over any grammatical/spelling mistakes. On the second part, I will go over each source individually and check that the text is supported by them. Should not take me more than a few days. Please feel free to disagree with any of my suggestions. If I post a change you disagree with, tell me. All I want is to improve the article! Anyways, thanks for writing this and I look forward to reviewing it. ComputerJA (☎ • ✎) 23:46, 4 March 2017 (UTC)

Part 1

Hi - this is the first part of my review. Great job here. Did not find any major issues with the prose! I'll be reviewing the sources shortly, let me know if you have any questions. ComputerJA (☎ • ✎) 00:35, 5 March 2017 (UTC)

Introduction and infobox

*Sofia – Please put an accent for this (Sofía). It is missing in the lead and infobox.

Background

*Claudio Tolcachir school in Argentina – Not a requirement, but should we link the school per WP:REDLINK? If the school is notable enough, I think you should

*In 2011 she earned a scholarship – Should it be In 2011, …?

Career

*Early career and first lead role with La Niña en la Piedra (Nadie Te Ve) - I think the section title is a bit long. Is there a way we can shorten it?

*Ignacio Ortíz in 2004 – Ortiz should not have an accent. It is an aguda and does not end in n, s, or vowel.

*Clarisa Malheiros – I checked on Google and most sources spell her first name with a double s, Clarissa. Consider revising this.

*La Niña en la Piedra (Nadie Te Ve) – Please this using the following format: {{Interlanguage link multi|La niña en la piedra|es}} to link this.

• Epigmenio Ibarra – Same here. I will work on English-language article for Ibarra and for Andrade. Javier Espinoza (talk) 03:02, 8 March 2017 (UTC)

• Sergio Andrade – Same here

*her imprisonment in Brasil – Fix to Brazil.

*"she did a lot of training for the musical sections … public persona to the heart of the woman” – Would you be able to paraphrase at least some parts of the quote? I think the quote is a little bit long, especially since you already quoted him and used quotes later. Consider paraphrasing this one or/and other quotes in this section.

*Sofia Espinosa stands out with her voice – Accent on the í.

*while Marco Perez – Add é instead

*the strangler of Tacuba – link Tacuba to Tacuba, Mexico City.

*older man (Juan Carlos Colombo) – instead of ( ), remove and put comma instead … older man, Juan Carlos Colombo. Also consider linking it to Spanish Wikipedia as suggested above.

*10th Works in Progress Guadalajara Festival– Is this part of the Guadalajara International Film Festival? If so, please link.

*In 2016 it was announced– Should it be “In 2016, …”?

Part 2

*to Mario Espinosa, a theatre director – The source says Mauricio, not Mario.

*and Secretariat of the Interior.[2] – Please remove the source per WP:CITEKILL. The next sentence has this source too so there is no need for this. I did this myself for other sources so use that as a reference.

*her first professional credit with the short film Cuidado con el Tren – the source does not state that this was her first professional credit. *Her next roles were inSea of Dreams and La Vida Inmune, in 2006. – Not in the El Universal source.

*and Clarisa Malheiros – Same here, not mentioned in source.

*in 2007 for the film El Brassier de Emma – No mention of 2007 in the source. The URL has a 2009 in it. Was it that year?

*In 2007, Espinosa performed in the short film Ver Llover - According to this source, it was 2006. [1] Three more years do not add up to 2011, as mentioned later in the paragraph. *in the film Vete Más Lejos, Alicia (2011).[8] – Could not access the source. Is it dead for you, too? If so, please consider adding it this [2] *She was also featured in Capadocia playing the character Paty – Not in source.

*In the film, directed by Max Zunino, she plays Flavia – No mention of Flavia in the source. Only of a young lady.

*in which the actress plays Martina – Not in source.

*Television section – Saw no mention of the words Paty or of the episodes, same goes for the other two films.

This is my entire review. Please address address them in a week. If you need more time, please let me know. Thank you and let me know if you have any questions! ComputerJA (☎ • ✎) 01:32, 5 March 2017 (UTC)