Talk:Solving History with Olly Steeds

Latest comment: 14 years ago by Mutt Lunker in topic Tone

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The article currently reads somewhat like a press release promoting the series. Parts of it at least seem to derive from the Discovery Channel web site, thankfully with some of the more ludicrous hype toned down. Refering to Steeds as Olly is overly familiar. References to his mission, quest etc. are not appropriate. "Olly uncovers exciting new evidence" - is it really new and its excitingness is POV - "that could lead once and for all to the discovery of the Amber Room" - maybe could have done but it didn't. Mutt Lunker (talk) 09:51, 27 June 2010 (UTC)Reply

Do you think {{peacock}} is more fitting? serioushat 06:31, 28 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
Yes, that fits. Mutt Lunker (talk) 07:52, 28 June 2010 (UTC)Reply