Talk:Sophiatown/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by 12george1 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 21:39, 1 March 2012 (UTC)Reply

The grammar in the article is very good and I would immediately pass if it the GA was based solely on that. However, there are several unsourced statements and some reference errors. The following are quotation appearing throughout the article of where I located an error (press Ctrl F to find these quotations):

  • "Because of these and other reasons most of the whites had moved out by 1920, leaving behind a vibrant multi-racial community. By the late 1940s Sophiatown had a population of nearly 54 000 Black Africans, 3 000 Coloureds, 1 500 Indians and 686 Chinese." - Two issues here. First, why is there a space between the numbers, rather than a comma (i.e. 54 000 --> 54,000)? Second, there is no citation here.
  • "2 000 policemen, armed with handguns, rifles" - See previous comment
  • "Over the next eight years Sophiatown was flattened and removed from the maps of Johannesburg." - [Citation needed]
  • " In the last 1 000 years, Iron Age" - See first comment again
  • "King Kong was South Africa's first blockbuster theatrical success, touring the country for a year with Miriam Makeba and the Manhattan Brothers' Nathan Mdledle in the lead roles. The musical later went to London's West End for two years." - [Citation needed]
  • "Current remnants of Freedom Square may be found beneath a school playing field alongside the Christ the King Church." - [Citation needed]
  • Why does references #1, #23, #24, #26, #32 and #36 have no accessdate?
  • Reference #10 is a deadlink. Either search through the WayBack Machine or Web Citation, or remove the link and find a replacement url. In addition, two urls in the External links section are also dead; I would suggest that you simply remove them.
  • Why is there no publication date for reference #37? The date for that reference is September 8, 2004.

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  • Digit grouping: The comma is not the standard thousands separator in South Africa, (we tend to think of it as being specifically American) so per WP:ENGVAR this is not an issue. See Decimal mark#Digit grouping. I will change the normal spaces to thin spaces, but I first need to find out how to do it in wikimarkup.  Done
  • The remaining issues are all about citations which will be attended to ASAP.
Thanks for doing the review. Roger (talk) 07:04, 2 March 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • All missing references have been fixed.
The references without access dates are either books or journals, with the exception of 1 which is generated from the South African Metadata template. See Template:Metadata South Africa
All deadlinks have been removed.
Access and publication dates for the last reference have been fixed. It is not 37 anymore as I added a reference.
From my side also thanks for doing the review ShiningWolf (talk) 12:28, 3 March 2012 (UTC)Reply