Talk:Sora (Kingdom Hearts)/GA3

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:57, 9 April 2016 (UTC)

I'll have this done within 48 hours. JAGUAR  19:57, 9 April 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• Is the character's story in the first paragraph based on the events of only the first game?
• "during a discussion between Disney and Square" - not Square Enix?
• "he turns into a merman in the sea" - like merman
• "But through the use of game items known as Keychains, the Kingdom Key can assume a variety of unique forms" - starting a sentence with "but" feels awkward. How about However, through the use of
• I think the last two paragraphs in the Appearances section could be merged into one, to improve flow
• "For this game, Nomura expressed a concerned if whether Sora should wear" - concern
• "he was nevertheless an up-and-comer" - 'up and comer'? I don't understand
• No dead links
• No dab links

Excellent article! It's well written and comprehensive. All refs check out too. On hold until all are clarified. JAGUAR  20:27, 9 April 2016 (UTC)

Ok, all set! I fixed the issues, and yes the company that negotiated to do Kingdom Hearts was indeed Square not Square Enix. Let me know if there is anything else, and thanks for the review! Judgesurreal777 (talk) 00:11, 10 April 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for addressing them so quickly! With all of those done, this should be good to go now. I know the difference between Square and Square Enix! JAGUAR  12:48, 10 April 2016 (UTC)