Talk:Soviet destroyer Gordy (1937)/GA1

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Reviewer: Parsecboy (talk · contribs) 14:55, 7 January 2019 (UTC)

I'll take this one. Parsecboy (talk) 14:55, 7 January 2019 (UTC)

Mostly nitpicks:

• Watch ENGVAR - I spy "meter" but also "draught"
• "many, but not all, of the ships handily exceeded their designed speed during their sea trials. Others fell considerably short of it." - this leads to the obvious question: was Gordy one of the former or the latter? Or did specific records not survive?
  • Sadly, no. Where we have specific data, it's been added. Should we add a some sort of disclaimer for the majority of ships for which the data doesn't survive. Any suggestions on phrasing?
    • I think I've used something along the lines of "Specific figures for individual ships have not survived" in similar situations. I had to do something with Caio Duilio-class ironclad for Emrico Dandolo's original engines.
      • That works.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:44, 7 January 2019 (UTC)
• "destroy mines, and" - no comma here
• "when a mine detonated when it...blown off when she struck", then a couple sentences later "damaged when her paravanes" - repetitive
  • Two separate incidents on the same day? We tried to change the wording. Any suggestions?
    • I was getting at the repetition of "when" - you might change it to "Gordy was slightly damaged by a mine that detonated when it was struck by one of her paravanes"

• • • Done. Kges1901 (talk) 17:28, 7 January 2019 (UTC)

• "defenders of Tallinn, Estonia" - move Estonia to the first time Tallinn is mentioned.
  • Umm, look at the end of the previous para.
    • I was thinking of moving it to here: "The destroyer subsequently fought in the defense of Moonsund and Tallinn as..." Right now, it's at "the defenders of Tallinn, Estonia" in the paragraph after that. Parsecboy (talk) 16:58, 7 January 2019 (UTC)

• • • Done. Kges1901 (talk) 17:28, 7 January 2019 (UTC)
      • Ah, I thought you were talking about the link to the city, not the mention of the country that it's in.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:44, 7 January 2019 (UTC)

Nice work. Parsecboy (talk) 15:17, 7 January 2019 (UTC)

• • Thanks for looking this over.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:37, 7 January 2019 (UTC)
    • Alright, everything looks good now.