Talk:Spiderwebs (song)/GA1
Latest comment: 6 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 18:10, 6 August 2018 (UTC)
- I will grab this for a review. It has been a while since I have thought about this song so it will be interesting to revisit it lol. I will most likely put up my comments over the weekend if that is okay with you. Aoba47 (talk) 18:10, 6 August 2018 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox
- For this part ( and released as the album's second single overall on November 19, 1995), I do not believe that “overall” is needed.
- I would revise this part (after bad poetry had been recited to her by an admirer) to (after an admirer recited bad poetry to her) to be more concise.
- For this part (Critically, "Spiderwebs" received positive reviews from contemporary as well as past critics), I do not believe that “Critically” is necessary.
- For this part ("Spiderwebs" also made an appearance on their 2003 greatest hits album), I would cut down “also made an appearance” to “appears” to be more concise. I also think it should be in present tense as the song is always a part of the album.
- Background and release
- I think you could use a better image of Stefani as her facial expression is not the most flattering.
- For this sentence ("Spiderwebs" was developed differently in comparison to how previous single "Just a Girl" was made.), I do not believe that “was made” is necessary.
- I think you can paraphrase "guitar parts”.
- Music and lyrics
- I think you can paraphrase the "reciting poetry” quote.
- Critical reception
- Good work with this section.
- Commercial performance
- Awesome job with this part.
- Music video
- I have always been told to avoid using non-free media unless it illustrates something beyond prose. I am not sure that the current screenshot fits that requirement as it does not illustrate a point of critical commentary. If you want to include a screenshot, I would include one of Stefani’s wardrobe and reference the critical commentary in the caption.
- Live performances
- Excellent work with this section.
- Cover versions and usage
- For this part (American singer Miranda Lambert), you can remove “American singer” as you did not include a descriptive phrase for other artists referenced here.
- Final comments
- Great work with this article. Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 03:46, 8 August 2018 (UTC)
- @Aoba47: I noticed this in the queue and decided to take in upon myself to fix most but not all issues with this article (and a few you didn't mention). The nominator can get pretty tied up with a lot of things, and since I actually liked this era of No Doubt, I wanted to make sure it got there. Besides, I've got a lot of spare time on my hands. What remains undone I leave for Carbrera to decide what to do, because I feel they're decisions I shouldn't make as a relative outsider.
- By the way, welcome back. Last I heard you had attempted to retire. dannymusiceditor oops 22:20, 8 August 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for the revisions. I enjoy No Doubt so it is an interesting read. I always try to retire, but I eventually return to editing. I am trying to not edit as much though >< lol. Aoba47 (talk) 00:56, 9 August 2018 (UTC)
- Aoba47 – I believe everything is addressed; I laughed so hard at your comment about the first picture of Stefani. And much love to DannyMusicEditor for helping address some of the concerns. Thanks, Carbrera (talk) 03:24, 9 August 2018 (UTC).
- By the way, welcome back. Last I heard you had attempted to retire. dannymusiceditor oops 22:20, 8 August 2018 (UTC)
- Verdict
- Thank you for addressing everything. I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 03:41, 9 August 2018 (UTC)
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