Talk:SpongeBob SquarePants season 7/GA2

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Ruby2010 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 02:55, 12 June 2014 (UTC)Reply

I shall review this, hopefully within the next few days. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 02:55, 12 June 2014 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
Comments
  • That first sentence in the lead is rather long; I suggest breaking it in two, perhaps after June 11, 2011.
    • Done.
  • The lead seems a bit sparse overall, as it is meant to summarize each section of the article body. Please add more content from the sections on Production, Cast, and Reception.
    • Done?
  • I'm not sure the Brown Johnson quotes need [...], since they are not breaking up any of his wording
    • Removed.
  • "Nickelodeon said on Wednesday, January 27, thatSpongeBob SquarePants..." -- space needed in there
    • Fixed.
  • No need to mention Brown Johnson's qualifications twice (the first time is sufficient).
    • Done.
  • "... to try something new where we can give SpongeBob's 16 million fans on Facebook a first look..." -- italicize SpongeBob
    • Done.
  • "...a miserly crab obsessed with money and SpongeBob's boss at the Krusty Krab;..." --> "...a miserly crab obsessed with money who is SpongeBob's boss at the Krusty Krab;..."
    • Done.
  • Watch out for tense shifts, especially in the Cast section: "Goodwin also guest starred..." but then you say "She lends her voice..."
    • Done? I'm sorry but I need you to check it again.
  • "The series received several recognition..." -- this doesn't make grammatical sense
    • Fixed?
  • Is Ian Jane referring to the overall series, or the seventh season? If the latter, it might be good to rephrase this to: "In his review of the seventh season for DVD Talk..."
    • Fixed.
  • You're using a lot of Ian Jane quotes; per WP:QUOTEFARM, is there anything you can rephrase into your own words? Same with the Josh Rode quotes.
    • Done?
  • "As for the character of SpongeBob, he criticized its voice ..." -- isn't SpongeBob a "he", not an "it'?
    • Fixed.
  • Are there any other reviews of the season out there? Perhaps on individual episodes?

The article isn't too far off from GA status, but still has a bit of a ways to go (mainly due to its prose). I'll place the article on hold while you take a look at my comments, and will add this review on my watchlist as you respond (so please respond here when finished with your edits/replies). I will return and give it a final review. Thanks! Ruby 2010/2013 02:02, 17 June 2014 (UTC)Reply

Hi Ruby2010! Thanks for your comments! Sorry if it will take longer for me to work on the article because I'm very busy. Friday/Saturday maybe. Thanks! — Mediran [talk] 10:12, 24 June 2014 (UTC)Reply
No problem, take your time! Ruby 2010/2013 16:34, 26 June 2014 (UTC)Reply
Your changes look good. I am now passing this for GA status. Nice work! Ruby 2010/2013 20:40, 28 June 2014 (UTC)Reply