Talk:SpongeBob SquarePants season 7/GA2
Latest comment: 10 years ago by Ruby2010 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 02:55, 12 June 2014 (UTC)
I shall review this, hopefully within the next few days. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 02:55, 12 June 2014 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
- Comments
- That first sentence in the lead is rather long; I suggest breaking it in two, perhaps after June 11, 2011.
- Done.
- The lead seems a bit sparse overall, as it is meant to summarize each section of the article body. Please add more content from the sections on Production, Cast, and Reception.
- Done?
- I'm not sure the Brown Johnson quotes need [...], since they are not breaking up any of his wording
- Removed.
- "Nickelodeon said on Wednesday, January 27, thatSpongeBob SquarePants..." -- space needed in there
- Fixed.
- No need to mention Brown Johnson's qualifications twice (the first time is sufficient).
- Done.
- "... to try something new where we can give SpongeBob's 16 million fans on Facebook a first look..." -- italicize SpongeBob
- Done.
- "...a miserly crab obsessed with money and SpongeBob's boss at the Krusty Krab;..." --> "...a miserly crab obsessed with money who is SpongeBob's boss at the Krusty Krab;..."
- Done.
- Watch out for tense shifts, especially in the Cast section: "Goodwin also guest starred..." but then you say "She lends her voice..."
- Done? I'm sorry but I need you to check it again.
- "The series received several recognition..." -- this doesn't make grammatical sense
- Fixed?
- Is Ian Jane referring to the overall series, or the seventh season? If the latter, it might be good to rephrase this to: "In his review of the seventh season for DVD Talk..."
- Fixed.
- You're using a lot of Ian Jane quotes; per WP:QUOTEFARM, is there anything you can rephrase into your own words? Same with the Josh Rode quotes.
- Done?
- "As for the character of SpongeBob, he criticized its voice ..." -- isn't SpongeBob a "he", not an "it'?
- Fixed.
- Are there any other reviews of the season out there? Perhaps on individual episodes?
- Sorry but I can't find any more reviews. — Mediran [talk] 06:58, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
The article isn't too far off from GA status, but still has a bit of a ways to go (mainly due to its prose). I'll place the article on hold while you take a look at my comments, and will add this review on my watchlist as you respond (so please respond here when finished with your edits/replies). I will return and give it a final review. Thanks! Ruby 2010/2013 02:02, 17 June 2014 (UTC)
- Hi Ruby2010! Thanks for your comments! Sorry if it will take longer for me to work on the article because I'm very busy. Friday/Saturday maybe. Thanks! — Mediran [talk] 10:12, 24 June 2014 (UTC)
- No problem, take your time! Ruby 2010/2013 16:34, 26 June 2014 (UTC)
- Your changes look good. I am now passing this for GA status. Nice work! Ruby 2010/2013 20:40, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
- No problem, take your time! Ruby 2010/2013 16:34, 26 June 2014 (UTC)