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  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Gomez.alexa. Peer reviewers: Jayshome.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 03:46, 18 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Planned changes to History and Key Accomplishments

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I would like to make the history and key accomplishments as one and turn it into a timeline. I approximate the sections to go a couple of years at a time. I think this will enable future success of the article, and that the current bulleted format for "Key Accomplishments" is not going to work for a progressing entity such as SportVU. Gomez.alexa (talk) 04:32, 21 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

I'm not sure if I understand what you mean by "timeline". Generally, we should try to use prose as much as possible per WP:PROSE. So, if you mean rewrite the bullet-listed "Key accomplishments" into short paragraphs of prose and add them to the "History" section, then that would probably be an improvement. On the other hand, if you mean converting both sections into one long bullet list in which the entries based upon calendar years, then I don't think that would be a good idea. -- Marchjuly (talk) 05:08, 21 March 2017 (UTC)Reply
You could add a picture or two since this is a actual physical product and I for example would have liked to see what they make in action. In addition to the history section a product section could be beneficial too. The introductory paragraph gives an overview of the company very well but I think the article deserves a section that goes in depth about the product, its use and specifications. Jayshome (talk) 16:33, 9 April 2017 (UTC)jayshomeReply
I think you need to be careful before adding any images and make sure that their use is in accordance with WP:IUP. Adding images to article can be tricky to copyright and almost everything you find online is likely to be copyrighted by someone. Before uploading anything, I suggest asking for assistance at WP:MCQ to make sure the image file is OK for uploading. -- Marchjuly (talk) 21:37, 9 April 2017 (UTC)Reply

Sales pitch?

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This article reads a lot like a sales pitch for the system, not an impartial or objective description.Marzolian (talk) 08:53, 24 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

I agree. This reads like a sales pitch. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 128.12.254.132 (talk) 21:04, 8 June 2018 (UTC)Reply