Talk:St. Martin, Idstein/GA1

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Reviewer: Yash! (talk · contribs) 08:51, 7 June 2015 (UTC)

I will do this, — Yash! ^(Y) 08:51, 7 June 2015 (UTC)

Lead

• Shouldn't the official name be better placed in ()?

I am not sure I know what you mean. If it is right after the article name, - better not. It's a lot of German before anything is clarified, and it's only of the church while the name is for both parish and building

• "church built 1888" -> can be tweaked.

yes --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:02, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

History of the parish St. Martin

• Use something other than "today", like "as of xxxx".

added year of naming

• There is an improperly used ")"
• "Protestant Unionskirche" sentence can be merged with the following one.
• "built in" -> "built from"

3 fixed --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:07, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

Construction of the present church

• "most simple shape" sounds subjective. Best to remove it.

"most" removed --GA

• "visible both inside and outside" -> "visible inside and outside"

I think that it is unusual and deserves being stressed by "both" -- GA

• What is the purpose of mentioning "Berlin" in brackets? Better to use "from Berlin" like "from" is used in the following section.

fixed --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:11, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

Restoration in 2003

• "also the crucifixion scene" -> You mean to say that it was also? If yes, then it needs a rewrite. Preferably use "and" after "The tabernacle"

tried --GA

• There isn't any better alternative of "young people"?

I am not familiar enough with those terms in English to know if there is a better one for "young people in preparation for confirmation", in German "Firmlinge" --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:17, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

Can "Confirmands" be used? If I am not wrong, it means the people who are about to undergo confirmation. — Yash! ^(Y) 22:40, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

Probably misleading, - at least in German it's "Konfirmanden", preparing for de:Konfirmation (Protestant), while "Firmlinge" prepare for de:Firmung (Catholic), --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:52, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

Mebold Organ

• Make "Orgelbau Mebold" a red link and use "(de)".

ill --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:18, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

Church music

• The whole section is not sourced or am I missing something?

Should I source by individual pages of the official website? Church music in services is often not covered by other sources. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:24, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

If no other sources are available, that should be fine. — Yash! ^(Y) 22:16, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

Heyo, some facts here still remain unverified if I am not wrong. Let me know if there are any sources available or not. It is alright if there aren't any as I am pretty happy with the work you have done and I don't see any problem in passing it. Cheers, — Yash! ^(Y) 14:45, 16 June 2015 (UTC)

We could reference by individual pages of the official site, as said before, such as this about the youth choir, this about the orchestra, etc. I have no extra time today, though ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:55, 16 June 2015 (UTC)

• "They have also included" -> by "They" you mean the choir or church?

I made it "The groups": three choirs and three instrumental ensembles. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:24, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

Choral concerts

• The first paragraph needs citations.

The first paragraph is a summary of the table, where each item is sourced. Unfortunately the regional papers reorganized their website, leaving several articles available when the article was first written in 2010 no longer accessable. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:27, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

References

• There is one dead link.

Replaced by German version.

Thank you for good commments! --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:33, 14 June 2015 (UTC)

My apologies for this delay. I am having trouble finding time for internet these days. I was waiting for you to cite the "Church music" section. Everything looks in order so passing it. Again, sorry for the wait. — Yash! ^(Y) 17:59, 21 June 2015 (UTC)