Talk:St. Petersburg Human Rights Ordinance

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Peer Review by Dorothy Potts This article is incredible easy to read and to the point. I was impressed by its amount of information and references. The way you addressed the history behind the ordinance was very well described. Perhaps a section about the current affects of the ordinance would be helpful, along with some major players that advocated for this. The most important thing I would suggest is to keep it so concise. I could forsee this aligning with my article, as it is an example of justice for minorities in St. Petersburg. This could apply in my article as a way to enforce equality through legislation. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Dfpotts (talk • contribs) 21:10, 12 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review from Joeybo (Joe)

Looks Great! Maybe a separate section could be added specifically addressing Equality Florida's involvement in regards to the ordinance or Bill since they were so involved in it. A section in the article about this would be awesome but care would have to be taken not to appear biased one way or the other. For example, use the word "argued," for both sides instead of using "argued" for one side and "claimed" for the other. Overall the first draft looks great and you have a lot of sources too.Joeybo (talk) 01:00, 4 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer edit by Chika Kasahara

This article is a great start to inform people. The brief paragraph was able to cover the important aspects such as the history, the leader and what it has done for St Petersburg.

I suggest to be a little more descriptive. For example, when talking about when the law was passed say the exact date, not just month and year because this is pretty important. It is mentioned that the law took many years to pass, could you guys figure out how many years it took? When describing Equality Florida, be a little more descriptive as well instead of saying it is an advocacy group that advocates... There were also some grammar errors as well. Instead of saying led, you say lead. "This later lead to the passing..." Another time you say, "This movement was lead by Equality Florida's leader Nadine Smith, which took years to pass due to overruling in city meetings." What took years to pass? the movement?

A little more description would go a long way and then fixing the grammar mistakes as well.

You guys did a great job overall. I bet it is difficult finding information and starting a wiki page from scratch so good work! I would give you guys an A+ !!

Aelindqu: St. Petersburg Human Rights Ordinance Peer Review

A good Wikipedia article should have a lead section that is easy to understand, a clear structure, balanced coverage, neutral content, and reliable sources. After reading through what you have written I notice that you have many sources listed and the ones you do have listed seem reliable. I can understand that there may be a lack of information available because we also ran into this same problem. The article does a good job of explaining what the Ordinance is and why it is noteworthy. I was impressed that you were able to find dates for these events. This article does not connect to our article on Johnnie Ruth Clarke but is a great addition to the little written about these Florida events, places, and people. The lead sentence is strong and right to the point. There is clear evidence of what the St. Petersburg Human Rights Ordinance is and why it is important. Even though it is all relevant, there is very little content. I think that more sources and picture would really benefit this article. Great job overall though! Signed AnnaAelindqu (talk) 11:50, 5 November 2018 (UTC)

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