Talk:Statue of Alexander Macomb/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: JJonahJackalope (talk · contribs) 19:32, 17 January 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Harper J. Cole (talk · contribs) 15:06, 13 April 2024 (UTC)

I'll take on this review. Harper J. Cole (talk) 15:06, 13 April 2024 (UTC)

Comments

Some suggestions - let me know what you think.

• It was designed by sculptor Adolph Alexander Weinman, was dedicated in 1908 in honor of Alexander Macomb... Replace the comma with "and".
  • Done.
• the National Society United States Daughters of 1812 Following the link, it looks like they're known as the "National Society of United States Daughters of 1812" (with an extra "of").
  • Added an extra "of".
• Leslie's Weekly reported that he had won a competition for the design The "he" in this sentence could be taken to refer to Leslie; recommend specifying Amateis.
  • Specified Amateis.
• Despite the announcement, Amateis's design for the monument would not come to fruition. Do we know why they didn't go with Amateis's design?
  • Unfortunately, none of the sources I could find made mention of why this was, so I was unable to add that information to the article. If I ever find a reputable source that discusses this in detail, however, I will update the article accordingly.
• The cost for the monument would be at most $10,000... Perhaps better to say that it was projected to be at most 10k (since it actually turned out to cost 12k)?
  • Done.
• ...had appropriated $5,000 and $2,000, respectively, to the project. Either "appropriated ... for the project" or "donated ... to the project".
  • Changed "to" to "for".
• ...who was 36-years-old at the time... You don't need to hyphenate "36 years old" in this instance. You would hyphenate where used before a noun ("36-year-old man") or instead of a noun ("the 36-year-old was happy").
  • Removed hyphenation.
• ...was unveiled by a niece of Macomb's Missing period at the end of this sentence.
  • Added period.
• In 1993, the monument was catalogued as part of the Save Outdoor Sculpture! project. Does this refer to the Macomb statue, or the Maybury statue?
  • It was in reference to the Macomb monument, and I have edited the article to specify this.
• "Slave Owner Land Thief" spray painted in red paint on the pedestal Hyphenate "spray-painted".
  • Done.
• "Concrete aggregate" can be wikilinked to Construction aggregate.
  • Done.

--Harper J. Cole (talk) 17:16, 13 April 2024 (UTC)

Harper J. Cole, I just wanted to reach out to let you know that I have made some edits to the article to address the points you raised in your review. Apologies for the late reply and thanks for starting this review, and if there are any further questions, comments, or concerns you have regarding this article, please reach out. Thanks, JJonahJackalope (talk) 17:38, 22 April 2024 (UTC)

Thanks, looking good now. I will promote. Harper J. Cole (talk) 19:33, 22 April 2024 (UTC)