Talk:Stefan Wever/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Lemonade51 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 14:26, 1 June 2014 (UTC)Reply

Happy to review this. On first glance this needs minor changes to meet the GA criteria.

  • "Because of continued pain in his shoulder, he instead spent the season with the AAA Columbus Clippers...", the reference cited doesn't confirm the bit in bold.
  • "After the seven games, he visited with Dr. James Andrews". That whole sentence could be rejigged as it reads a tad disjoint. Perhaps something like, "After the seven games, he visited Dr. James Andrews, who diagnosed the twinge he suffered two years earlier as a torn rotator cuff and torn labrum; it explained why he had been throwing 85 mph since the injury, compared to 95 mph beforehand"
  • "and spent the rest of the year rehabbing the injury", I'm unfamiliar with this. Perhaps reword for the benefit of readers outside North America?
  • "While working at his bar, Wever also returned to baseball in a coaching role.", how about 'made a return'?

No dab or dead links. No issues with references. Will pass once comments have been addressed, on hold till then. Lemonade51 (talk) 14:26, 1 June 2014 (UTC)Reply

Issued fixed. Thanks for the review! Wizardman 14:40, 1 June 2014 (UTC)Reply
Will pass, nice work. Lemonade51 (talk) 15:45, 1 June 2014 (UTC)Reply