Talk:Stephen Sutton/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 00:28, 19 May 2016 (UTC)

Happy to review. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 00:28, 19 May 2016 (UTC)

Fairly well-written, only a few comments: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 01:17, 19 May 2016 (UTC)

• You may wikilink "bowel cancer"
  • I have changed it to "colorectal", which is the title of the Wikipedia article. '''tAD''' (talk) 15:33, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
• In "Early life", perhaps add when the interview took place in the line In his final interview, to the Daily Mail...
  •  Done '''tAD''' (talk) 15:33, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
• In "Illness and activism",

• The link for "spreading" is a duplicate link.
  •  Done '''tAD''' (talk) 15:33, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
• will climb Mount Kilimanjaro in her son's memory It would be better to say "plans to climb" if this is a goal of hers.
  •  Done '''tAD''' (talk) 15:33, 19 May 2016 (UTC)

• In "Documentary",

• Just curious, I wonder why the inverted commas in the quotes should look different. I think you can use the same template.
• Place some citations at the end of the first para, it looks unsourced just now.
• with his best friends "close friends" would sound more proper
• The documentary is currently in development and will be made into a feature-length film. Don't say "currently", say "as of 2016" (if this documentary is still under development).

• All done '''tAD''' (talk) 15:33, 19 May 2016 (UTC)

• In "Death and reaction"

• You can place Chris' comment in a quote template
• You can simply say "Manford" instead of his full name, now that you have introduced him.
• On 21 May it was announced that a public vigil Announced by whom?
  •  Done '''tAD''' (talk) 15:33, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
• Wikilink BBC

• In "Music"

• You can simply say "bucket list", not "Bucket List"

• A dablink or two need to be fixed. [1]
  •  Done The other highlighted dab is for the hatnote at the top '''tAD''' (talk) 15:36, 19 May 2016 (UTC)

No copyvio detected, images are properly licensed. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 01:17, 19 May 2016 (UTC)

Sainsf all queries have been responded to. '''tAD''' (talk) 15:36, 19 May 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the response. This can be promoted. Great article! Sainsf (talk · contribs) 17:23, 19 May 2016 (UTC)

Burial - questionable statement (section Death and reaction)

The paragraph mentioning his funeral states "He was buried the next day". However the BBC News release used as citation does not explicitly state when his burial took place. I therefore question whether the citation should be regarded as supporting the statement. I would be inclined to rephrase the sentence "He was privately buried later" to fit what the citation says, though "later" is an open-ended term.Cloptonson (talk) 06:47, 15 December 2022 (UTC)