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Latest comment: 11 years ago by Adhib in topic Tone looks fine to me...
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Tone looks fine to me...
I don't mean to disagree outright, but I do a lot of this kind of writing, and the current tone on 10/12/2005 looks GREAT to me. I suggest the tag be removed. —Kth 13 October 2005
- (Please sign your posts.) I agree with Proto; the article currently has a bit of a "how-to" feel, and should be rephrased to sound neutral and encyclopedic instead. I've made several minor changes that I hope will help. --LostLeviathan 05:29, 15 October 2005 (UTC)
- I would also tend to agree with Proto. I think the article is extremely essay-like, has abrupt topic changes, very little overall 'flow,' and is oddly specific when addressing (for example) Genesis while barely or not at all addressing (for example) non-oral storytelling. -Trillian, 28 November 2005
- I agree with Proto - the article is very essay-like. Case in point: Opening with a quote rather than a definition. Needs major cleanup, which I will begin later. Have reinstated the "inappropriate tone" tag. —EatMyShortz 14:47, 14 February 2006 (UTC)
- Oh, I see what's happened. At the time Kth wrote his comment ([1]) it was a lot better (for instance, it didn't open with an essay paragraph). But it seems to have since deteriorated. Perhaps fixes could be made with reference to that version (not a redirect, just using it to help). —EatMyShortz 14:56, 14 February 2006 (UTC)
- It's been a while, clearly. I think the tone is now far too piecemeal, academic and essay-like. Ironic, for an article about telling stories. Anyone interested in a clear-up? Adhib (talk) 14:45, 4 March 2013 (UTC)
- Oh, I see what's happened. At the time Kth wrote his comment ([1]) it was a lot better (for instance, it didn't open with an essay paragraph). But it seems to have since deteriorated. Perhaps fixes could be made with reference to that version (not a redirect, just using it to help). —EatMyShortz 14:56, 14 February 2006 (UTC)