Talk:Strange Overtones

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 09:41, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

• No dablinks, ref 19 (Pitchfork) is dead

Infobox

• Remove caption for cover art
• Rewrite format as [[Music download|Digital download]]
• Trim the "recorded" info
• Remove the label parameter, as there is no label
• Writers' names are sufficient; their specific jobs can be mentioned in prose
• Either remove the caption of the audio file or reformat outside of the infobox using {{Listen}}

Recording and release

• Link demos
• "with all collaborations being carried on via e-mail" - awkward (better?)
• "The first single off the album, the song was released" - name the album and song
• "as a DRM-free MP3s digital download only available through the album's website at no cost" - awkward (better?)
• "This song, like the rest of the album, was made available free for streaming and for purchase as a download" - the free download is already mentioned
• You need only refer to Eno by his surname
• "A live recording of the song would also appear" - change to past tense

Lyrical themes

• This section should be titled 'Composition' and include info on its musical makeup. At the moment the genres in the infobox are WP:OR

Reception

• MOS:HASH violations and strange paragraphing are the main issues here

Overall

• The biggest issue with the article is the quality of prose. Read through and copy-edit the article, and take a look at my suggestions. It is also a bit short; try to look for some other sources. (Here's one) Adabow (talk · contribs) 09:41, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

Getting started This has happened with all of my GA/FA/FL nominations: prose is the hardest part for me. Categories, sourcing, templates, simple copyediting, etc. are usually not a problem, but writing good prose (the meat of an encyclopedia article) usually gives me trouble. As you can see, I've gotten a start on your suggestions—and taken the liberty of striking them through; I hope this isn't a problem—and I'll finish them off soon. Thanks. —Justin (koavf)❤T☮C☺M☯ 21:05, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

I am more than happy to copy-edit the entire article if you need me to. Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:26, 16 June 2011 (UTC)

Thanks That would be nice—again, the prose itself is not my strong suit. As you can see, I've also written Everything That Happens Will Happen Today and that has a lot of references and a lot of prose, but it also needs work (I'm not asking you to dive into that one, too, I'm merely pointing out my chronic poor writing and also the prospect of sources for this article.) If you think that it can become GA quality with pretty minimal effort, then I'm definitely interested in doing what you think it takes to pass. —Justin (koavf)❤T☮C☺M☯ 20:47, 16 June 2011 (UTC)

I have one more issue, but otherwise I believe that the article is up to GA standard: Leo Abrahams is mentioned a lot in the infobox, but nowhere in the section about the song's background. Can you expand on Abraham's role in the song? Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:47, 17 June 2011 (UTC)

Done? Is that reasonable? Thanks for your input and thanks for passing this as GA. —Justin (koavf)❤T☮C☺M☯ 18:33, 18 June 2011 (UTC)

Nice work. Passing now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 21:35, 18 June 2011 (UTC)