Talk:Straylight Run (album)

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GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:27, 6 October 2020 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Another review for the GAN Backlog --K. Peake 11:27, 6 October 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Producers should be separated with bullet points instead of commas
• The release sentence should be the second of this paragraph instead of the first of the second para; I will later instruct what to re-word it to
• "Shaun Cooper after the pair left" → "Shaun Cooper, after both of them left"
• "and Nolan's sister, Michelle Nolan," → "and John's sister Michelle Nolan," with the appropriate target per MOS:SAMESURNAME
• "They made some demos and toured through" → "The band recorded some demos and toured throughout"
• "on their debut album." → "on the album."
• "They tracked it at" → "Straylight Run tracked it at"
• Wikilink Woodstock, New York
• "and June 2004 with" → "and June 2004, with"
• "The record was released in October 2004 through independent label" → "It was released on October 12, 2004, through"
• "Several tours across the US followed with" → "The band embarked on several accompanying tours across the United States with"
• "Something Corporate and Firescape, and performances at" → "Something Corporate, and Firescape, as well as delivering performances for"
• "The music on Straylight Run moved away" → "The music on Straylight Run moved away"
• "Taking Back Sunday into piano-centred" → "Taking Back Sunday, transitioning into piano-centred"
• Last sentence should be about the critical reception in this para; move the one from the third para to this position instead
• "sold 11,000 copies in its first week of release and reached number 100 on the Billboard 200." → "reached number 100 on the US Billboard 200 in the first week of release, with sales of 11,000 copies."
• "In addition, it reached the top five of the" → "It further charted at number four on the"
• Identify the chart as Independent Albums since that is the full name
• "It would go on to sell over 225,000 copies as of September 2005." → "As of September 2005, the album has sold over 225,000 copies." and mention that this is in the US only
• "received a positive response from critics," → "received generally positive reviews from music critics," with the target
• "complimenting the album's sound and others disliking" → "complimenting the sound though others disliked"

Background

• Retitle to Background and recording
• "debut album, Tell All Your Friends, in" → "debut studio album Tell All Your Friends in"
• "the group found themselves" → "the band found themselves"
• "the band, with bassist Shaun Cooper leaving" → "Taking Back Sunday, while bassist Shaun Cooper left"
• "Taking Back Sunday frontman Adam Lazzara said that" → "Frontman Adam Lazzara said that"
• "touring, however, Nolan later accused" → "touring; however, John later accused"
• "to his sister Michelle," → "to his sister Michelle Nolan," with the target
• "Nolan and Cooper formed" → "John Nolan and Cooper formed"
• "These recordings laid" → "The recordings laid"
• "pop songs which would" → "pop songs, which would" with the target
• "After recording the demos," → "After the demos had been recorded,"
• "and Cooper and Nolan were" → "while Cooper and Nolan were"
• "work with Breaking Pangaea." → "work as part of Breaking Pangaea."
• "Nolan was sharing an apartment with his sister, Michelle, at the time. He learned" → "John was sharing an apartment with Michelle at the time, with him learning"
• "to do anything with them." → "to do anything with the songs."
• "Witnessing her talent, he decided" → "Observing her talent, John Nolan decided"
• "The quartet continued practicing" → "With their line-up complete, the quartet continued practicing" since the source mentions this
• "the name Straylight Run." → "the name Straylight Run, after a large amount of discussion and debating." since this is notable
• "In August, Nolan and Cooper" → "In August 2003, Nolan and Cooper"
• "fan-recorded versions were" → "fan-recorded versions of the songs were"
• Where do any of the sources mention two songs on the radio showcase?
• "the band quickly posted" → "Straylight Run quickly posted"
• "to help keep up" → "for helping keep up"
• "being posted, the band was playing" → "being posted online, the band were playing"
• "the band was attracting offers" → "Straylight Run were attracting offers"
• "major labels and interest" → "major labels as well as interest"
• "The group embarked on" → "The band embarked on"
• "of the northeast US" → "of the northeast United States"
• "closed the year," → "closed out the year,"
• "US tour (co-headlining with the New Amsterdams), and" → "US tour that they co-headlined with the New Amsterdams, and"

Writing and production

• "their debut album," → "their debut studio album,"
• "on their UK tour in" → "on their tour of the United Kingdom in"
• Target acoustic to Acoustic music
• "the track retained its" → "the tracks retained their"
• "structure but had a different feel to it" → "structure, but some had a different feel to them"
• "added their parts to it." → "added their parts."
• "As a result, the band were" → "As a result of this, Straylight Run were"
• Wikilink Woodstock, New York
• "to record their album at" → "to record the album at"
• "away from Nolan" → "away from John Nolan"
• "With a brief break to play" → "After a brief break to play at"
• "concluded in June." → "concluded in June of that year."
• "The band lived in" → "Straylight Run lived in"
• "Bethpage, New York, for" → "Bethpage, New York, for the tracks" with the wikilink
• "Album sessions were produced and recorded by" → "Straylight Run was produced and recorded by both"
• "later mixed the recordings." → "also mixed the album." with the target
• "and incorporated new songs" → "and created new songs"
• "of The Format contributed vocals" → "of the Format contributed additional vocals" per MOS:THEMUSIC
• "provided additional vocals on" → "both provided additional vocals on"

Composition

• Retitle to Composition and lyrics
• "featured Nolan (left) and Cooper (right)" → "featured John Nolan (left) and Shaun Cooper (right)" on the img main text, with the targets
• Imgs need alt text

Overview

• Does not need to be a sub-section or even sub-heading, just keep as the first two paras of this section
• "Nolan said that" → "John Nolan said that"
• "when in reality they showcased" → "when in reality the change showcased"
• "by the time that album" → "by the time the album"
• "the writing of those songes" → "the writing of the songs"
• Remove wikilink on Emo
• "of Taking Back Sunday and into indie rock territory." → "of Taking Back Sunday, transitioning into an indie rock sound."
• "Though the album retains" → "Though Straylight Run retains"
• Target synth to Synthesizer
• "and "Now It's Done" and provides" → "and "Now It's Done", alongside providing"

Tracks

• Does not need to be a sub-section or even sub-heading, but keep as separate paras below the first two in the new order
• "The opening track," → "Straylight Run's opening track,"
• "vocals and pianos, with accompanying bells" → "vocals over pianos, alongside accompanying bells"
• Target hook to Hook (music)
• "from Nolan, before Nolan and his sister harmonize in" → "from John, before him and Michelle harmonize vocally on"
• Target refrain to Chorus
• "Nolan plays a" → "John plays a"
• "escalates from a sole piano" → "escalates from a lone piano"
• Target chords to Chord (music)
• "Nolan said it was about" → "John Nolan said the track is about"
• "are reminiscent of" → "were described as reminiscent of"
• "a coda with violins." → "a coda and violins at the end."
• Wikilink "Sunrise Highway" per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "It was written a few years" → "The track was written a few years"
• Remove target on Brand New
• Wikilink Massapequa, New York
• "up-tempo electronic instrumentation, such as synthesizers." → "up-tempo electronic instrumentation, which includes synths." with the wikilink and target
• "highlights the band's musical strengths" → "incorporates the band's musical strengths"
• "second verse"." → "second verse.""

Release

• Retitle to Release and promotion
• "the band signed with independent" → "Straylight Run signed to independent record label" with the wikilink
• "After finishing the recording, the band" → "After finishing the recording of Straylight Run, the band"
• "in June and July." → "in June and July of 2004."
• "for release in September." → "for release in September of that year."
• "The band appeared on" → "Straylight Run appeared on"
• Target KROQ to KROQ-FM
• "from the album and" → "from Straylight Run and"
• "On September 26, the group filmed a video" → "On September 26, 2004, the band filmed a music video" with the wikilink
• "The train repeatedly" → "The subway train repeatedly"
• Wikilink MTV
• "was released on October 12 through." → "was released on October 12, 2004, through."
• "the band held" → "Straylight Run delivered"
• "In October and November," → "In October and November of 2004,"
• "the band won" → "Straylight Run won"
• Target Launch.com to Yahoo! Music Radio
• "which earned them a" → "which earned them the spot to deliver a"
• "In January and February, the band" → "In January and February of 2005, the band"
• "Following this tour, the group played" → "Following the tour, Straylight Run played"
• "before embarking on a UK tour in March." → "before they embarked on a UK tour in March of that year."
• "In April and May," → "In April and May of 2005,"
• Target vinyl to Phonograph record

Reception

• Wikilink Johnny Loftus
• "said that the while the album included" → "said that while Straylight Run includes"
• "added that the band" → "continued, saying Straylight Run"
• "Spin compared Nolan's" → "the staff of Spin compared Nolan"
• "found it" → "found the album to be"
• "texture than catharsis"," → "texture than catharsis,""
• "Michelle's vocal appearance" → "Michelle Nolan's vocal appearance"
• "change-up" with the rest of the group" → "change-up," with the rest of the band"
• "wrote that the record" → "wrote that Straylight Run"
• "let down"," → "let down,""
• "emotionally charged", while saying that" → "emotionally charged," though said that"
• "the tracks with Michelle" → "the tracks with Nolan"
• "Straylight Run sold over 11,000 copies within its first week of release, reaching number 100 on the Billboard 200." → "Commercially, Straylight Run reached number 100 on the US Billboard 200, with first week sales of over 11,000 copies."
• "It also reached number four" → "It also entered at number four"
• Target Billboard to Billboard (magazine)
• "the album had sold over 225,000 copies." → "the album has sold over 225,000 copies in the US."
• "on a best-of emo songs list" → "on a list of the best emo songs"
• Target Vulture to Vulture.com per MOS:LINK2SECT

Track listing

• Are you sure it is not known who produced each one of the tracks?

Personnel

• Personnel per booklet,[15] except where noted. → Personnel per booklet.[15] since the sources make it clear that info is taken from them
• Target Shaun Cooper to Shaun Cooper (musician)
• Remove wikilink on Will Noon

Charts

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks smooth at 25.4%
• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
• Remove or replace ref 1 per WP:RSSM

I thought this one would be fine since you previously said that SM was alright for interviews, as ref 1 is an interview with the band's bassist Shaun Cooper. Yeepsi (talk) 14:06, 7 October 2020 (UTC)

• Remove wikilinks on Straylight Run and Victory Records for ref 15
• Authorlink Johnny Loftus on ref 18
• Retitle ref 33 to Newsletter #209
• Retitle ref 34 to Newsletter #288
• Target Vulture to Vulture.com on ref 41 per MOS:LINK2SECT

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until the issues are fixed, which should not take too long since I did notice that you have some good writing skills! --K. Peake 13:48, 7 October 2020 (UTC)

Done! Yeepsi (talk) 14:06, 7 October 2020 (UTC)

Yeepsi Sorry for the late response, I did not know you had completed what I proposed because I wasn't mentioned and had been busy elsewhere on this site. ✓ Pass! --K. Peake 08:23, 13 October 2020 (UTC)