Talk:Stuttering Foundation of America

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Fellow Editors- I work for a web development firm assisting the Stuttering Foundation of America with their web presence. We have been tasked with creating this page in a functional manner. I will be submitting edits for review to this page to make it correct and within Wikipedia's guidelines. Please discuss here any problems. Thank you, Bivings Bivings (talk) 13:57, 13 May 2011 (UTC)

Edit Summary 5/23/11

Fellow Editors- I made a suite of changes to the page in order to rectify the various problems. Changes made including adding relevant references and removing advertisement-like language. Please let me know the proper course for making any further changes if necessary. Thanks, Bivings —Preceding unsigned comment added by Bivings (talk • contribs) 21:03, 23 May 2011 (UTC)

First of all, all contact information is deemed inherently promotional. (That the organization is non-profit changes nothing.) That means no phone numbers or people to ask for anywhere in the article, unless it's common knowledge (such as "911"). Such information should be limited to a bare URL located either in an external links section, or in an infobox, or both.

Information about the concept of stuttering should be written in the article stuttering, not in the article about the Foundation.

If you intend to reference a statement with an URL, make sure the reference directly and obviously supports the statement. That wasn't the case with the reference you used to support The Foundation sponsors educational conferences, workshops and symposia on specific topics such as working with the school-age child, and week-long intensive training workshops for speech-language pathologists. In addition to be improperly referenced, that statement is, quite frankly, too vague to be encyclopedic. -- Blanchardb -^{Me•MyEars•MyMouth}- timed 17:05, 26 May 2011 (UTC)

If no substantial third-party sources about the Foundation can be found (that is excluding stuff the Foundation released itself, or paid for, such as press releases), then perhaps an expansion of the article Malcolm Fraser (philanthropist) (please don't confuse with the Australian politician) is in order. -- Blanchardb -^{Me•MyEars•MyMouth}- timed 17:26, 26 May 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for pointing out where this page needs work. I've addressed your concerns in these numbered responses.

1. I've removed all contact information. 2. I've removed the information about the concept of stuttering 3. I've added additional references and re-contextualized the first reference to make it more obvious. 4.All of the references used are third-party sources. Please let me know if there are any other changes necessary. Thanks, Eric — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bivings (talk • contribs) 18:08, 31 May 2011 (UTC)

How can I clean this page up to have more neutrality and have the edit template removed? Please let me know what I can do to have this page appear appropriately. Thanks, BivingsBivings (talk) 20:32, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

Self-Published Sources

The following sources are self-published - either found on the organization's website, or published by the organization.

"International Stuttering Association". 6 May 2011. Archived from the original on 2013-11-03. Retrieved 2013-11-01.

"Michael Palin Centre Partnership". 6 May 2011. Archived from the original on 2013-11-03. Retrieved 2013-11-01.

"Resources". Archived from the original on 2013-10-13. Retrieved 2013-11-01.

"Workshops Help Therapists Improve Skills". 15 May 2013. Archived from the original on 2013-11-03. Retrieved 2013-11-01.

"Welcome to Stuttering Education". Archived from the original on 2013-11-05. Retrieved 2013-11-01.

"Stuttering Foundation of America -- Looking Back and Looking Forward". Mnsu.edu. 1998-08-23. Archived from the original on 2021-05-07. Retrieved 2022-02-19. 204.152.164.5 (talk) 22:06, 6 February 2024 (UTC)