Talk:Sud-Ouest Espadon/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 08:57, 18 February 2021 (UTC)

I will review, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 08:57, 18 February 2021 (UTC)

Lead

• link mixed-power?
  • Spelled it out instead.

Background

• link Lucien Servanty
• ...and submitted the SO.6020 when the French Air Force issued not crazy about the phrasing here. Suggest something like "and submitted a design proposal, designated SO.6020, in response to the French Air Force issuing..."
  • Rephrased.
• The aircraft had have a speed "had have"? Maybe " had to have.
• with planes to order "plans"?
• aircraft satisfied the requirements. suggest "aircraft satisfied its requirements.
• The aircraft was a metal-skinned mid-wing suggest "As built, the aircraft was a metal-skinned mid-wing..."
• was the Heinkel ejection seat part of the original specification?
  • Yes.

Development

• possibly due to the need to revise the air intakes shouldn't intakes be singular? Or should the first mention of intakes be plural?
  • Good catch.
• Is there a link for SO.6025?
  • No.
• I'm confused by the references to the SO.6021 in this section. On the one hand, it is a fighter prototype and on the other it is the proposed production version.
  • I think that I've clarified it now

Specifications

• Is it necessary to recite the book titles here, can't [16], [17] just go against the "General characteristics" heading?
  • The aircraft specs template won't allow that

• OK, I didn't realise that was a template. Zawed (talk) 03:19, 27 February 2021 (UTC)

Other stuff

• One dupelink - cockpit
• Image tags look OK

That's it for me. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:34, 18 February 2021 (UTC)

Hey Sturm, just checking you've seen this. Zawed (talk) 09:06, 25 February 2021 (UTC)

Looks good to me, passing as GA as I believe it meets the criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 03:19, 27 February 2021 (UTC)

See if my changes are satisfactory. Thanks for being patient with me.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:24, 25 February 2021 (UTC)