Talk:Super Paper Mario/GA2

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 22:08, 1 March 2021 (UTC)Reply


I'll tackle this. ♦ jaguar 22:08, 1 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

Lead
  • I feel the artwork caption is a tad superfluous - I'd remove the word 'packaging'
      Done.
  • "Critics praised its gameplay, mainly its dimension-flipping mechanic, originality, and story" - remove this to improve flow, and link game mechanics
      Done.
  • "critics have since regarded as one of the best" - missing 'it'
      Done.
  • " Paper Mario: Sticker Star followed in 2012." - was this a sequel?
    It seems as if every video game article has something like this, but I've improved the writing.   Done.
Gameplay
  • "overcoming linear platforming in theme of standard games in the Mario franchise" - would read better as overcoming linear platforming in like those of other games in the Mario franchise
      Done.
Development
  • "which never materialized but was never officially canceled" - repetition, replace with 'not'
      Done.
Reception
  • "The review aggregator website Metacritic reported that Super Paper Mario received "generally favorable reviews"" - this shouldn't be in past tense: According to the review aggregator website Metacritic, Super Paper Mario received "generally favorable reviews" with a score of 85 out of 100...
      Done
  • "calling it "slightly weaker" than most Mario platformers" - perhaps feeling it was "slightly weaker"
      Done.

I think that's about it. This article is solid and GA-worthy - once all of the above nitpicks are out of the way then by all means this should be good to go.  jaguar 22:35, 1 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

Jaguar, Well, that was easy. Concerns have been addressed. Thanks for picking this up, considering you just reviewed an article of mine. Panini🥪 23:25, 1 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
It's fine, this was is good shape anyway. With all that out of the way - let's promote this.  jaguar 11:24, 2 March 2021 (UTC)Reply