Talk:Sweet Nothing (Calvin Harris song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 15:52, 15 July 2014 (UTC)

Overview

Prose: See below

Sourcing: See below

Coverage: See below

Neutrality: See below

Stability: No issues

GA Result: Failed. Prose and sources need more work, and article should definitely be expanded.

Details

Lead

• Given how short the paragraphs are, it might be better to have three rather than four
• "It features vocals from Florence Welch, the lead singer of the English indie rock band Florence and the Machine"..... a bit lengthy, try "It features vocals from Florence and the Machine singer Florence Welch"
• "and he had to chase her, due to her schedule"..... doesn't ready very well, I'd go with simply "due to schedule conflicts"
• "Welch accepted the invitation"..... his invitation
• "love-strung vocals and a bouncy, ever-building beat"..... POV
• "The song is also Welch's first top-ten hit in the United States"..... let's make note here of the position it reached in the United States
• "dingy bar/strip club"..... per WP:SLASH, please separate these terms. One option could simply using "bar" or "club"
• "she plots to rid herself of at least one problem"..... make note of what such problem(s) would involve

Background and development

• "that his third studio album would be released"..... here we should use the name of the album
• "While recording for his then-upcoming album, 18 Months" → "While recording for the album"
• "He has previously worked with Florence and the Machine, her band, when he contributed a remix of their single 'Spectrum' (2012)" → "He had previously worked with her band Florence and the Machine on a remix of their 2012 single 'Spectrum'".
• Combine the first and second paragraphs before the quote
• "f---" → "fuck" per WP:NOTCENSORED
• Move the quotebox to the top of the section
• Metro (ref#5) is not a reliable source
• "He further explained, saying that" → "He also stated"
• "He hadn't started working"..... avoid contractions unless part of a quote or title
• "He commented to Rolling Stone that"..... told Rolling Stone, and Rolling Stone should be italicized
• "'Sweet Nothing' first premiered on The Chris Moyles Show on BBC Radio 1, on 28 August 2012 and was released as the fifth single from the album, on 14 October 2012"..... insert a comma after "28 August 2012" and remove the commas after "album" and "BBC Radio 1"

Composition

• "It is a relationship of 'sweet nothing'"..... try involves or addresses a relationship
• "It's not long before the recording kicks into high gear with a massive building dance floor ready chorus"..... not an encyclopedic sentence at all, needs to be rewritten entirely
• Per WP:OVERCITE, a ref should not be used more than once in a row within a paragraph
• The Huffington Post (ref#10) isn't the most reliable of sources, but is certainly more credible than things like Perez Hilton or Daily Mail
• What makes "She Knows" (ref#11) a high-quality professional source?
• About.com reviews from Bill Lamb (ref#12) are not reliable per WP:ALBUM/SOURCES

Critical reception

• see above note on (ref#11)
• see above note on (ref#12)
• "Yahoo! UK" (ref#13) should just read Yahoo!
• "Jason Lipshut"..... his name is Lipshutz, though the Billboard link (ref#14) doesn't seem to contain any author name
• "Rebecca Nicholson of The Guardian called it 'the highlight of 18 Months'"..... why is there no link provided to the review from The Guardian?
• Is Filter (ref#15) reliable?

Commercial performance

• How come there are subsections or UK, United States, and Oceania but no other region? This section should include details about the other countries it had high chartings in as well.
• see above note on ref#5 regarding ref#19
• More WP:OVERCITE to address with ref#20 (Digital Spy)
• "The song was a huge success in Australia"..... a less POV term would be commercial success

Music Video

• Some critics' reviews of the music video would be nice

See also

• Since the "List of number-one dance singles of 2012 (US)" page doesn't exist, this section is essentially pointless

References

• Why do some refs have publishers and others do not? It would be better to have all or none.
• MTV News (ref#3) should not be italicized
• ref#7 is missing a work field
• Idolator (website) (ref#8) should not be italicized
• see above note on ref#13
• see above note on ref#14
• Digital Spy should not be italicized for ref's #20, #21, and #22. Unlink Digital Spy in ref#22
• "Billboard Magazine" should be unlinked and read Billboard in ref#30
• Unlink Billboard in every Billboard ref except for ref#14