Talk:Tana Tidung Regency

GA Review

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Reviewer: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 17:52, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi there, I'll be reviewing this article shortly. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 17:52, 2 January 2022 (UTC)

I've left comments on each of the article's sections, so I'll place the nominations on hold to give you time to address them. No rush. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 03:05, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi, thank you for the review. I will address the problems as soon as possible. Nyanardsan (talk) 06:38, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

@PCN02WPS I have addressed all the problems you mentioned. I merged politics and local government subsection since there is not much unique to the regency in terms of government structure, but I still think it is important to briefly explain how regencies in Indonesia works to the reader.

Please take a look, thank you~ Nyanardsan (talk) 07:23, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

I have addressed two issues that are written in the table, please take a look now Nyanardsan (talk) 09:56, 10 January 2022 (UTC)

Thank you, that's all that I have! The article looks good, and I am happy to pass it. Well done! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 17:36, 10 January 2022 (UTC)

Lead/infobox

The lead is fine, if not a little short; perhaps a bit from the "history" section could be placed there before "created in 2007" as a bit of context.

• The "HDI" parameter in the infobox has a bit with yellow text that is not readable, which violates MOS:CONTRAST; yellow is also on the list of colors that are not acceptable against a white background as listed at MOS:ONWHITE
• Even though it's linked in the infobox, I think Tideng Pale could be linked in the lead as well.

History

Etymology

• "The name, Tidung, comes from the word..." → I don't think the commas before and after "Tidung" are necessary.
• "The town's name, Tideng Pale..." → I'd change to reflect that this is not the only town, as the current wording is a bit ambiguous.
• The meaning of the word tideng is given in the previous sentence, and it is given in lowercase at first and uppercase at the second mention, which should probably be consistent.

Early history

• First sentence should probably be sourced, and "it is believed" sounds a bit vague; perhaps specify whether this is a broad consensus or a niche theory, or something in between.
• "The spread of Islam in Indonesia..." → Islam in Indonesia could be linked here.
• "Its first king is thought..." → specify to what extent this is thought (same as above), and "its king" is a bit ambiguous as it is unclear which kingdom (Tidung or Berayu) it refers to.
• "The last King of Tidung..." → "King" is capitalized here but is lowercase earlier in the paragraph - I'd be consistent with capitalization here.
• A brief explanation of what Afdeeling Tidoengschelanden is would be helpful as some readers (myself included) are unfamiliar with this term.

Post-independence

• "The creation of a Tidung-dominated regency was realized in 2007 based on Law Number 34 of 2007" → This sounds slightly redundant, I'd reword to eliminate one of the two bolded parts (emphasis is mine).

Geography

• "has an area" → This isn't super crucial, but I think it'd be helpful to specify whether you're referring to land area or total area here.
• "between 0-40% grade" → I'd change the hyphen (-) to an endash (–).
• "most of its flat land with a slope of less than eight percent is along the coast" → add bolded word (emphasis is mine). I'd also think about converting "eight" to a numeral "8" even though it's less than ten, since the "0" and "40" in the prior sentence are given as numerals.
• Give the range in temperature as 21–25 rather than 25/21; the latter is not immediately recognizable as a range.

Governance

• "2010 Census" and "2020 Census" could be linked to 2010 Indonesian census and 2020 Indonesian census, respectively.
• "by splitting them off from the Sesayap and the Sesayap Hilir Districts respectively" → bolded word should be added.
• The local government subsection is a bit generic - it gives some broad information about regencies but doesn't give any specific information about the local government of the Tana Tidung Regency in specific.
• I think the table in the "politics" subsection could be converted to prose at the end of the existing paragraph.

Economy

• I would word the agricultural output similarly to the livestock output; worded as "74.5 tons of chili" as opposed to "chili with 74.5 tons".
• Warung doesn't look like it needs to be italicized and put in quotation marks; I think the quotes are unnecessary after taking a look at the target article.
• "...which handle most transactions." → Most transactions in the country are handled by the previously mentioned 342 warungs, or those 342 handle a majority of transactions among all warungs in the country?
• "-0.74%" → A minus sign (−) should be used, rather than a hyphen (-).

Demographics

• Is "regions" being used as a specific term or a general term? Should "regencies" be used here instead?
• What constitutes being "economically active"? This term doesn't mean as much if the reader doesn't know what exactly it means.
• "Tana Tidung is the least populated regency in the entire country, and consists of a large island in the northeast of the regency" → This doesn't quite make sense - the regency consists of a large island in the northeast of the regency?
• This may be a mistake with my math but I think the sex ratio would be 1.15 if there were 115 males for every 100 females.
• I'd move Hinduism behind Buddhism so you can keep the religions in order of percentage.

Infrastructure

• Since puskesmas is plural, I'd change the translation "community health clinic" to the plural "...clinics".

Overall

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	I made a few minor edits to clean up minor grammar issues, so I have no issues with grammar that I can see.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	There are a few instances of weasel words, particularly the phrase "it is believed that..." or the like. I have tagged the two instances I found with {{By whom}} in hopes that they can be clarified.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	There are a few paragraphs, namely in the early history section, that go quite a ways without a citation. In that particular section, the first paragraph goes from "Another kingdom, Berayu..." to "...the help of the Dutch in 1916" with just two citations after the latter sentence. Is all of that information covered by those two references?
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	Earwig gave a 0.0% similarity.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	All images are used properly; no fair use.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	Nomination remains on hold pending the comments in the table above.

Did you know nomination

The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 06:08, 23 January 2022 (UTC)

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• ... that Tana Tidung Regency, the smallest regency by land area in North Kalimantan also has the lowest poverty rate in the province? Source: https://tanatidungkab.bps.go.id/publication/2021/02/26/b6d7be2fa8e46d3b8c3f9edc/kabupaten-tana-tidung-dalam-angka-2021.html
  • Comment: QPQ soon

Created by Nyanardsan (talk). Self-nominated at 20:18, 10 January 2022 (UTC).

• I shall review this. Storye book (talk) 16:35, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: Thank you,Nyanardsan for a thorough and careful article on a region of Indonesia. It was promoted to GA on 10 January 2021. The hook has 129 characters and is repeated in the article; both cases are cited, and both cases are offline, therefore taken AGF. Just one issue: QPQ pending. When that is done, this nom should be good to go. Storye book (talk) 16:55, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

• Template:Did you know nominations/Andi Sudirman Sulaiman QPQ done, sorry it took a while for me to get into good Wikimood. Please take a look Nyanardsan (talk) 18:37, 22 January 2022 (UTC)

• Thank you, Nyanardsan. QPQ done, good to go. Storye book (talk) 23:09, 22 January 2022 (UTC)