Talk:Tanjong Katong MRT station/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: ZKang123 (talk · contribs) 09:36, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 12:02, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

I'll review this article. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 12:02, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for making these changes. I'm happy to pass the article, but I would like to see the "hidden histories" stuff excised or clarified first. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 12:27, 18 August 2024 (UTC)

I think the 'sediment' part should be removed. The "hidden histories" part is suffice enough imo Please '@' my username so that I get notified of your response (talk) 12:10, 20 August 2024 (UTC)

Sounds good. I'll pass once you remove that part. Imbluey2 Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 12:29, 20 August 2024 (UTC)

Done. User:Imbluey2 Please '@' my username so that I get notified of your response (talk) 12:52, 20 August 2024 (UTC)

Prose and content

• First sentence, or at most second should mention that this is in Singapore.
  • Done.
• along with a mural Riding add "entitled"
  • Done.
• The station was first announced as Amber + "station"
  • Tbh I prefer to avoid repetition of station in the same sentence. "The station was first announced as Amber station"
• while the owners seek more compensation past tense
  • Fixed.
• On 5 March 2024, the LTA announced that the station will open on 23 June that year[11][12] with an open house event being held on 21 June to allow commuters to familiarise themselves with the new station. use sources saying that these things happened and reword to avoid "it was announced it would open on X date" and then "it opened on X date".
• The artwork, which title was derived grammar
  • Fixed.
• Di Tanjung Katong gloss, I assumed it was a poem but it appears to be a song
• As a reflection of Tanjong Katong's past and memories too literary
  • Changed to "To Portray..."
• "hidden histories" found in the sediments left over from land reclamation Can you be more clear what this means?
  • I'm not so sure either. It's what the commentary says.

Definitely remove it if it appears to be incoherent. The reader is going to get nothing out of it. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 12:27, 18 August 2024 (UTC)

• Why is turtle capitalised?
• From some Googling, it seems the Katong Turtle is extinct rather than endangered.
  • The source states it's endangered. So I guess that's the latest on their status? That's very unfortunate.
• Tell me about the Maybe add presentation of mural to Mountbatten SMC advisor? comment
  • Something Imbluey2 (talk · contribs) left behind. I don't think it's particularly relevant.
• Conform to sentence case of Sim Chi Yin's artwork
  • Fixed.
• Remove hyphens in Art-in-Transit to conform to source
  • Fixed

Other

• Images appropriately tagged, thankyou for taking most of these photos. Y
• Neutral Y
• No COPYVIO/OR Y 16.7%: Titles of art
• Broad/not too narrow Y, pending invisible comment re
• Stable Y

Sources

Page revision

Spot check:

• [3] Y
• [6] Y
• [9] Y
• [12] Y
• [15] Y
• [18] clock a different source should be added here inline to say it's below Amber Rd. Looking at the maps, it's not even apparent that it is built under Amber Rd
• [19] clock ^
• [21] Y
• [24] Y
• [27] Y
• [30] clock duplication of [27], tension with linked source in prose/content review on turtle

Suggestions

• which was opposed by the -> despite opposition from

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 12:02, 17 August 2024 (UTC)

Hi, I put the Maybe add presentation of mural to Mountbatten SMC advisor? comment as on source [30] (https://www.tkgs.moe.edu.sg/riding-the-waves-of-change/), it said that the artwork was presented to the Mountbatten SMC advisor Lim Biow Chuan but I'm not sure if it's considered as promotional content per Wikipedia:NOTPROMO so I just added the invisible comment as a suggestion. Looking back at it, it probably counts as promotional content. As for the turtle, I'm still researching on whether it was extinct or not. User:Imbluey2 Please '@' my username so that I get notified of your response (talk) 02:12, 18 August 2024 (UTC)

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