Talk:Task Force on Childhood Obesity

Some suggestions

I thought this was a great topic to choice. I would want to know more about what schools are doing about this. Other than that well i thought it was well written. Symons2 (talk)

The introduction needs to clarify that the President didn't outline the steps that the Task Force will take to reduce obesity. Rather, the charge to the Task Force is to develop a plan to reduce obesity. Marlenefine (talk) 16:42, 1 April 2011 (UTC)

I enjoyed this article a great deal. But at the end where you list the members I think you should just list them, making The capitalized and take (;) out - because they are already numbered. Cdjsuarez (talk) 17:01, 3 April 2011 (UTC)

This article could use more information/statistics on how this initiative is progressing. Where does the task force stand currently.Dabenson (talk) 18:53, 5 April 2011 (UTC)

I added links to their Wikipedia pages for the members of the task force. I had to change their names to the versions used in their Wikipedia articles (generally shorter nicknames), however, because I couldn't remember how to make a straight vertical line. You can go back and correct the names in those links.Marlenefine (talk) 23:08, 5 April 2011 (UTC)

You did a wonderful job summarizing the goals effectively in a concise manner. NasroF (talk) 20:49, 26 April 2011 (UTC)

Great article! What would make it even more effective perhaps would be some statistics that support why the task force was necessary. Wonderful job overall though! Iman richards (talk) 17:18, 27 April 2011 (UTC)

Great Job

I thought your article was very informative and very clear! It seems like you did a great deal of research and I liked that you quoted from the task force. Also, I liked how you bolded and listed the goals section. That made it easy to read and follow. Online readers are attracted to lists so no wonder so many people read your article when it was up for "Did You Know?" Great Job! I edited small grammar mistakes Sfofana (talk) 21:14, 5 May 2011 (UTC)

Praise and criticism

The "Praise and criticism" section contains only one quotation, and mentions only one source of popular press commentary. There is only praise, no criticism. Some research should be done to include at least a couple of the criticisms.

Also, the use of a single reference, '"Solving the Problem of Childhood Obesity Within a Generation". The White House. Retrieved 5 April 2011,' a total of 4 times in the References Section is bad form and bad style. It makes the article look poorly researched. The word "Ibidem" or its abbreviation "Ibid." should be used if the same location in the reference if cited multiple times. If the reference is cited at several locations at different times, the locations should be distinguished through the use of the phrase "loco citato" (in the place cited) or its abbreviation "loc. cit.", combined with a distinguishing page within the reference. Whichever Latin entry is used, the full word or phrase should be used only with the first citation, and the abbreviation should be used with subsequence citations.

Stylistically, this article reads like a Press Release, which detracts from any appearance of absence of bias.

In brief, this article needs more background research. Tadchem (talk) 18:50, 8 April 2011 (UTC)

Please feel free to Be bold and add Verifiable material to the article and rewrite the language. However, we currently were having difficulties finding any non-press releasy commentary on the Task Force, Sadads (talk) 18:59, 8 April 2011 (UTC)

Wikipedia Ambassador Program course assignment

This article is the subject of an educational assignment at Simmons College supported by WikiProject United States Public Policy and the Wikipedia Ambassador Program during the 2011 Spring term. Further details are available on the course page.

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