Talk:Te Vas/GA1
Latest comment: 5 years ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:22, 3 September 2019 (UTC)
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Will get to this sometime before Friday. Been a bit too busy recently for reviews, but I'm back on one shortly! --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:22, 3 September 2019 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
edit- "You Go" or "You Leave" → "You Go" or "You Leave" as alternate titles mentioned in leads are also put in bold
- This is not true. Bold markup should only be use if that title or word(s) redirect to this page. "You Leave" and "You Go" both don't redirect to this article.
- Not true, by that logic "Te Vas" redirects to this page when it doesn't, that's linking to disambiguation. If the title goes in bold, so do other official titles.
- "the fifth single for her sixth studio album" → "the fifth single from her sixth studio album"
- Do the production duo need to be linked twice in a row
- I think this is useful since they both don't have separate articles, and the Wikipedia page for Play & Win tells info about both.
- Fine
- "material, "Te Vas" lyrically" → "material, the track lyrically"
- "accompanying music video for the track was uploaded onto" → "accompanying music video for "Te Vas" was uploaded to"
- "official YouTube channel" → "YouTube channel" as you don't need to put official since it says that in the body and don't overquote everything to lead
- Should contemporary dance be contemporary dances?
- I am confident the singular form suffices here.
- Fine
- "representing and on-and-off" → "representing an on-and-off"
- "For further promotion, Inna performed "Te Vas" for Romanian radio station Kiss FM in June 2019.[1]" add this to the music video section and retitle it "Music video and promotion"
- Such one line info can stay in the lead as well, since they don't quite fit in the given section. I've done this on other GAs too, but of course you decide.
- I agree with you
- "It peaked at number 36" → "The track peaked at number 36"
- "ranking" → "chart"
Background and composition
edit- Change target Engineering (music) to Audio engineer
- "was hired for its" → "was hired for the"
- Change target Mixing (music) to Audio mixing (recorded music)
- Change target Mastering (music) to Mastering (audio)
- "from Inna's sixth studio album Yo" → "from Yo" as we already know it's her sixth studio album. I know the lead repeats things but this should only be in the lead
- "and as a" → "and called it a"
Reception
edit- Add some mentions of the song from Yo album reviews to create this section and also mention the chart position in it if this is possible?
- No album review is (at least significantly enough) saying something about the track critically, and thus the inclusion of the chart peak is also futile.
Music video and promotion
edit- Retitle as above
- See above
- "was uploaded onto Inna's official" → "was uploaded to Inna's official"
- "four days earlier" → "four days prior"
- "It was directed" → "The video was directed" as they may think it's the teaser
- Target director of photography to Cinematographer
- "as the producers" → "as the producers, respectively" to show they have separate roles
- Place info about previous visual at the end of music video info, as it is out of place in the video itself description
- I disagree. The teaser info comes atop the section, where release information is talked about. The synopsis follow afterwards, parallel to the teaser info.
- "contemporary dance and acrobatics was" → "contemporary dance and acrobatics, was" to flow better with connectives
- "abandoned gymnasium"." → "abandoned gymnasium" in the music video."
- "start to finish."[5]" → "start to finish".[5]"
- "was released 31 July 2019" → "was released on 31 July 2019"
- Add sentence about promotion at the end
- See above
Track listing
edit- Good
Charts
edit- Good
Release history
edit- Territory → Country
- Give ref separate column and center it
References
edit- Can't review these until Wiki fixes the current issue which I'm sure you are aware of.
- WikiLink iTunes Store on ref 3
- Change publisher to website for Billboard and remove italics as website parameter automatically does that
Final comments and verdict
editFix the issues and this will be passed, On hold for now! --Kyle Peake (talk) 16:30, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: Hey, I commented... Thank you very much for the review. Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:24, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:43, 7 September 2019 (UTC)
- Nice one, ✓ Pass now! --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:44, 7 September 2019 (UTC)
- @Kyle Peake: Done Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:43, 7 September 2019 (UTC)