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GA Review

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 13:22, 9 September 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I'm MarioSoulTruthFan and I'll be reviewing your article.

Lead

• and founding → and one found

 Done

• native Airplay 100 → see the reception.

 Done

• You are using the "exact same sentences" in the lead as in the entire article, paraphrase them.

 Done

Background

• Stan accused him of physically attacking and blackmailing her, and also appeared injured on Romanian television, with her eventually taking a break from her career. → Stan accused him of physical attack and blackmail. This event led her to appear injured on Romanian television and taking a career break.

 Done

• —Maan Studio— → use {{spaced ndash}}

 Done

• Put "-Lemonade", "Cliché (Hush Hush)" and "All My People-" in between brackets instead of dashes and add a coma when you close the brackets.

 Done

• "record producers and songwriters Alex Cotoi and Erik Lidbom" → are they new or the same? The sentence makes me believe they are the same as always but I'm not 100% sure.

 Done No, they're not the same. I tried to reword this a little bit to make it clear.

Recordings and composition

• fellow Romanian → who? this indicates she met someone, producer song-writer does he/she has a name?

 Done They haven't got names provided by the source; changed it to "various"

• It also serves as her first ballad released in her career → It also serves as the first ballad released in her career.

 Done

• violent incident → violent incident previously mentioned

 Done

• "I wont..." → I know it's a quote, but still...

 Done

Reception

• being positive → what do you mean? Needs to be more accurate.

 Done Reworded and emphasised

• they → who? The previous two publications

 Done Reworded

• the website → which webstite? The latter or the former?

 Done Reworded

• native Airplay 100 → Romanian Airplay 100

 Done

• The recording performed well on Ukraine's FDR Pop Songs, eventually topping it on the week ending 1 June 2014 → could use a little more description since it peaked here.

 Done I think I've done it, haven't I?

Not really you could say that it debuted on the issue week, spent "x" amnt of weeks on the top or in the chart and so on MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:17, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

Oh, now I got what you meant, but this is an archive. There are no further archives of this chart in that time spawn to write about its chart performance. Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:48, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

Ok then, thank you. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:54, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

Music video and promotion

• Name the director.

 Done

• It was preceded by the release of three short films—"Rebirth of a Passenger", "No Regrets" and "The Right Moment" → what are these short films? I don't get it.

 Not done I need you to explain this to me. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:18, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

They are kind of short films that serve in fact as previews for the music video. Having all different names, they show the singer dancing a choreography with backup dancers while we have no music, but her telling stories and speaking out different sentences. Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:48, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

Write what you just said here in the article. I believe it will provide a better clarification for the GP. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:56, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

• Replace all the "-" for {{spaced ndash}}

 Done it here and in the lead section of the article

• but Stan closes him the door in his face → but Stan closes the door in his face.

 Done

• including her performing the song to a bar's crowd that he makes part of → including a performance of the song to a bar's crowd in which he is featured

 Done

• Scenes interspersed through the main video present the singer laying over the abandoned vehicle, and her playing the piano in her room → Scenes interspersed through the main video present the singer laying over the abandoned vehicle, and playing the piano in her room

 Done

Track listing

• Fine

Thank you!

Credits and personnel

• Visual credits → the video or the artwork or both?

It's just the music video; renamed section

• editing (in the visual credits) → should be liked.

 Done

• Use {{spaced ndash}}

 Done It's already used

Are you sure? Take a second look mate. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:22, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

I have previously tried to insert the ndash, but what came out was exactly the same as the dashes already used. Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:48, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

I see, I'm sorry I'm just used to see them in a different way. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:58, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

Charts

• Fine.

 Done

Release history

• Digital single → Digital download?

 Done

References

• Ref. 35 is dead.

 Done

External links

• Fine.

 Done

Overall GA review

• Do not make any changes until I say so. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:58, 10 September 2016 (UTC)
• You can now proceed to make changes. On hold for seven days. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 15:06, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

@MarioSoulTruthFan: All done! Thanks for your review as always. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:33, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

@Cartoon network freak: I've left you some notes, to make it easier for both of us, I changed them into  Not done. Ping me when you done. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:24, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Responded to your comments. To thank you for your GAR, I'm looking forward to review Unorthodox Jukebox. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:48, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

@Cartoon network freak: It's just missing one thing, It's he only one which has  Not done, easy pass. Are you sure you want to review such article? It's quite long...good luck. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:59, 11 September 2016 (UTC)

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Done! Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:20, 11 September 2016 (UTC)