Talk:That Still Small Voice/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 03:23, 17 January 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Ruby 2010/2013

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have my full review up shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 03:23, 17 January 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

• a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
• b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

WP:LEAD:

Check for WP:LEAD: Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done Check for Introductory text:  Done Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done Major Point 1: Plot "In this episode, Emma (Jennifer Morrison) is deputized … is revealed along with his yearning to leave the family business and transform into the person he wants to be." (not a concise summary of the Plot section) Major Point 1.1: In the characters' past "" (not in the lead) Major Point 1.2: In Storybrooke "In this episode, Emma (Jennifer Morrison) is deputized … is revealed along with his yearning to leave the family business and transform into the person he wants to be." (not a concise summary of the In Storybrooke section) Major Point 2: Production "It was the first Once Upon a Time episode to be written … and I think a lot of people feel like that."[1] (summarised well in the lead.) Major Point 3: Cultural references "" (not in the lead, a layout issue) Major Point 4: Reception "That Still Small Voice" first aired in the United States on … Jiminy's characterization and Sbarge's performance." (not a concise summary of the Reception section, the Reviews subsection should be expanded) Major Point 4.1: Ratings " "That Still Small Voice" first aired in the United States on … among the major networks." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 4.2: Reviews "Since then, it has garnered generally positive … Jiminy's characterization and Sbarge's performance." (not a concise summary of the Reviews subsection) Check for Relative emphasis:  Done Major Point 1: Plot "In this episode, Emma (Jennifer Morrison) is deputized … is revealed along with his yearning to leave the family business and transform into the person he wants to be." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 1.1: In the characters' past "" (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 1.2: In Storybrooke "In this episode, Emma (Jennifer Morrison) is deputized … is revealed along with his yearning to leave the family business and transform into the person he wants to be." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2: Production "It was the first Once Upon a Time episode to be written … and I think a lot of people feel like that."[1] (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 3: Cultural references "" (not in the lead, a layout issue) Major Point 4: Reception "That Still Small Voice" first aired in the United States on … Jiminy's characterization and Sbarge's performance." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body, the Reviews subsection should be expanded) Major Point 4.1: Ratings "That Still Small Voice" first aired in the United States on … among the major networks." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 4.2: Reviews "Since then, it has garnered generally positive … Jiminy's characterization and Sbarge's performance." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done "That Still Small Voice" is the fifth episode of the American fairy tale/drama television series Once Upon a Time. Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done Check for Proper names and titles:  Done Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None Check for Pronunciation: None Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done Check for Biographies: NA Check for Organisms: NA Check for Biographies of living persons: NA Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done Check for Non-English titles: Check for Usage in first sentence: Check for Separate section usage: Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done The lead should be expanded. Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None

WP:LAYOUT:

Done Check for WP:LAYOUT:  Done Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  Done Check for Headings and sections:  Done Check for Section templates and summary style:  Done Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):  Done Short paragraphs and single sentences generally do not warrant their own subheading. (WP:BETTER). Fix "Cultural references" section. Either this section should be removed or it should be expanded. Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  Done Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):  Done Check for Works or publications:  Done Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO): None Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):  Done Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER): None Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL):  Done Cross-checked with other FAs: Over There (Fringe) & Pride & Prejudice (2005 film) Check for Links to sister projects:  Done Check for Navigation templates:  Done Check for Formatting:  Done Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):  Done Check for Links:  Done Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):  Done

WP:WTW:

Done Check for WP:WTW:  Done Check for Words that may introduce bias:  Done Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):  Done Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):  Done Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):  Done Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):  Done Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):  Done Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):  Done Check for Expressions that lack precision:  Done Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):  Done Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):  Done Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):  Done Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None Check for Offensive material (WP:F***):  Done Check for WP:MOSFICT:  Done Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  Done Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):  Done Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):  Done

WP:EMBED:
None Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE): Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research

• a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
• b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google. Cross-checked with other FAs)

WP:RS:

Done Check for WP:RS:  Done Cross-checked with other FAs: Over There (Fringe), Pride & Prejudice (2005 film), Caroline of Ansbach, Sense and Sensibility (film)‎ Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING): (not contentious)  Done Is it contentious?: No Does the ref indeed support the material?: Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Who is the author?: Jusino, Teresa (Tor.com) (TV Guide) Phillips, Jevon (Orlando Sentinel) (The Futon Critic) Webb Mitovich, Matt (TVLine) (The Hollywood Reporter) Halterman, Jim (The Futon Critic) Gonzalez, Sandra (Entertainment Weekly) Sava, Oliver (The A.V. Club) Dove, Steve (American Broadcasting Company) Murphy, Shaunna (Entertainment Weekly) Porter, Rick (Zap2it) O'Connell, Michael (The Hollywood Reporter) (Daily Herald) (BBM Canada) Prudom, Laura (AOL TV) Ratcliffe, Amy (IGN) Does the author have a Wikipedia article?: What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?: What else has the author published?: Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?: Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Tor.com TV Guide Orlando Sentinel The Futon Critic TVLine The Hollywood Reporter The Futon Critic Entertainment Weekly The A.V. Club American Broadcasting Company Entertainment Weekly Zap2it The Hollywood Reporter Daily Herald BBM Canada AOL TV IGN Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):

WP:MINREF:

Done Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:  Done Check for Direct quotations:  Done "have their adolescence well after adolescence. It took Jiminy a long time to figure out how to get away from the life he was living, and I think a lot of people feel like that."[1] (Random check on source 1, successful, as below) "thrilled to get it," … "Someone who you might think … of people feel like that".[1] (Random check on source 1, successful, "Jane Espenson: The episode was sort of handed to me, but I was thrilled to get it. It’s what I would have picked. I love taking a character like Jiminy and exploring them. He’s someone who you might think of as being part of someone else’s story – even in Pinocchio, he’s all about someone else’s arc. I like taking that character and reminding us all that everyone is the hero of their own story. I related to him because of that, and also because it was such an identifiable story — the way so many people have their adolescence well after adolescence. It took Jiminy a long time to figure out how to get away from the life he was living, and I think a lot of people feel like that.") "so engaging" … "incorporated a third, separate modern storyline" … "each storyline got just enough attention."[1] (Random check on source 1, successful, "… Storybrooke/Fairy Tale format, but incorporated a third, separate modern storyline for which the situation with Henry …") "intimate character moments, particularly the scenes between Archie/Jiminy and the boys in his life," … "navigated both Archie and Jiminy’s journeys from being pawns to being their own men with precision and warmth."[1] (Random check on source 1, successful, "But the best part of the episode, and the thing that always tends to be Espenson’s strength, were the intimate character moments, particularly the scenes between Archie/Jiminy and the boys in his life.") "fantastic concept". She explained, "What's the modern take on Jiminy Cricket and Rumpelstiltskin? What would their issues be in the real world? The beauty of the production, the care and the effort and, honestly, the expense that was put into it just made clear that was a project done with a lot of attention and love."[3] "in that they have a large ensemble and what they do is that they take a few characters and they kind of take them, effectively on a deep dive."[6] "treading into people's imaginations," but ultimately decided that "they cast me for a reason because there are some qualities in me that they obviously recognize for the story they want to tell."[7] "sort of a surrogate father figure" to Henry, Sbarge admitted that the script "made me weep because what they came up with is so lovely and magical and delightful."[8] "what you get to see on this trip are the fire rings he had to walk through to get to a place where he could evolve to develop a sense of doing the right thing."[5] "proved to be an undeniably satisfying hour of television, deepening our understanding of Archie/Jiminy's character and giving us some welcome development in Mary Margaret and David's tragic romance. I don't know about you, but I really could watch a whole hour of those two playing hangman and innocently flirting and need nothing else from the show."[19] "ragged on Robert Carlyle initially, his campy Rumpel is quickly becoming one of my favorite parts of this show."[13] "Gilmore struggles to make a connection with his character, so it always looks like he’s reading lines," … .[9] "this episode juggles the expansive character roster of this series better than its predecessors."[9] "never liked Henry as much as I did in this episode," … .[20] "most touching backstory" … "the transformation of Dr. Hopper was moving, and this episode maybe felt the most like a fairytale of the stories we've seen so far."[20] Check for Likely to be challenged:  Done Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): NA

• c. No original research:  Done

WP:NOR:
Done Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  Done Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):  Done Check for original images (WP:OI):  Done

3: Broad in its coverage

a. Major aspects:

Done Cross-checked with other FAs: Over There (Fringe), Pride & Prejudice (2005 film), Caroline of Ansbach, Sense and Sensibility (film)‎ Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources: Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS: Check for Out of scope: Check for The range of material that belongs in the article: Check for All material that is notable is covered: Check for All material that is referenced is covered: Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered: Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge: Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

b. Focused:
Done Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH): Check for Article size (WP:TOO LONG!):

4: Neutral

WP:NPOV:

Done 4. Fair representation without bias:  Done Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):  Done Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):  Done Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):  Done Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):  Done Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  Done Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  Done Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  Done Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  Done Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI): None Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV): None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images  Done (Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license)

Images:

Done 6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  Done Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  Done Image (Raphael Sbarge at PaleyFest 2012.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Check for copyright status:  Done Image (Raphael Sbarge at PaleyFest 2012.jpg): (Free) Check for non-free content (WP:NFC): None Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR): NA 6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  Done Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  Done Image (Raphael Sbarge at PaleyFest 2012.jpg): Relevant to the article Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE): None Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  Done Caption - "The episode featured Jiminy Cricket (played by Raphael Sbarge)" (succinct and informative)

As per the above checklist, the issues identified are:

• The lead does not provide an accessible overview and does not give relative emphasis.
• The lead should be expanded.
• Fix "Cultural references" section.

This article is a very promising GA nominee. I’m glad to see your work here. I’m putting the article on hold. All the best, --Seabuckthorn ♥ 09:27, 18 January 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for reviewing. I will get to addressing your comments within the next day or two. Regards, Ruby 2010/2013 04:02, 22 January 2014 (UTC)

No worries and no rush. Take your time. I'm removing it from hold so that you are under no pressure. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 05:37, 22 January 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for reviewing! I have addressed most of your concerns (except one: I just wasn't sure what else from the Reviews section I could incorporate into the lead -- its main points are already summarized well (IMO), and I believe that the Reviews section itself is long enough. It'd be great if you could expand upon your thoughts on this. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 02:01, 26 January 2014 (UTC)

Thanks! You're right. I misjudged it. Apologies. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 02:59, 26 January 2014 (UTC)

Promoting the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 02:59, 26 January 2014 (UTC)