Talk:The Adventures of Totor/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Gabriel Yuji in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gabriel Yuji (talk · contribs) 20:54, 5 February 2014 (UTC)Reply

It seems good. However, there are some issues:

Thanks for the insightful review, Gabriel Yuji! Midnightblueowl (talk) 10:33, 6 February 2014 (UTC)Reply

Good job! You only missed other overlinks; I said Thompson is an example, not the only. But it's ok now. You did a excellent work here; the images, sources and all other criteria are fine. I'll be glad to pass it. I just have two last (I swear) points:

  • the lead is almost perfect (it sumarizes well "Characters and story" and "Publication" sectios), but there is not a concise summary of the "Critical analysis" section in the body; the lead and the body should give the same emphasis to the article's sections per MOS:INTRO#Relative emphasissection
  • the "Adaptations" section is a bit awkward (probably not the best word to use): a) it's only a sentence b) although the name is similar, it's not clear in the text if Rotor was based on Totor; the source also don't clarify it

--Gabriel Yuji (talk) 16:58, 6 February 2014 (UTC)Reply

Now, it seems fine to me. Passing. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 16:51, 7 February 2014 (UTC)Reply