Talk:The Battle (Star Trek: The Next Generation)/GA1

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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 03:18, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• "The Stargazer was to originally be represented by the movie-era Enterprise model," -- Do you mean the Enterprise-A?

• Well... the refitted Enterprise that originally appeared in the same film was the same model as they later used for the Enterprise-A. So I didn't want to specify A as it wouldn't have been quite correct. However, thinking of that now, the movie-era reference could be misleading as a new reader might think it was a reference to the new films by mistake. I'll edit it to say that it means the movie-era model first used in the Motion Picture. Miyagawa (talk) 11:21, 1 March 2013 (UTC)

• " In this episode, Captain Picard (Patrick Stewart) is given his old command, the Stargazer," -- This should be reworded (Here, 'command' makes it sound like the Ferengi assigned Picard to captain a new ship)

• Re-worded to avoid using command. Miyagawa (talk) 11:51, 1 March 2013 (UTC)

• "DaiMon Bok (Frank Corsentino) who intends to use it as part of a trap to discredit and destroy the Enterprise captain." -- the plot section doesn't clarify this. If this is what appears in the episode, though, I think it would be better than just saying Bok wanted "revenge."

• Changed to revenge as suggested. Miyagawa (talk) 11:51, 1 March 2013 (UTC)

• In Plot you at times alternate between using just last names and first names (Picard and Crusher vs. Geordi LaForge) Please make consistent.

• Done - also made sure the lead was the same too. Miyagawa (talk) 11:51, 1 March 2013 (UTC)

• Redundancy: "Picard appears back on the Enterprise and appears normal. "

• Removed. Miyagawa (talk) 11:51, 1 March 2013 (UTC)

• For continuity, you might want to note in Production the next time the Ferengi appear.

• I'll have to double check the books tonight - I think after this episode they changed the way that the Ferengi appeared on screen, and they were no longer used as "baddies" but instead more for comedic effect. I'm sure one of the books will make reference to this. Miyagawa (talk) 11:51, 1 March 2013 (UTC)

• "The term "Picard Maneuver" was later used to also refer to Patrick Stewart's habit of tugging his uniform shirt down," -- Informally and not on screen, I assume

• Yep, but I wish it was! I'll edit that line to make that clear. Miyagawa (talk) 11:21, 1 March 2013 (UTC)

• I found no duplicate links. Disambiguation links all look good. External links all look good.
• I don't see any problems with article stability or neutrality.

Placing the article on hold pending a few improvements. —Ed!^(talk) 22:05, 26 February 2013 (UTC)

One nitpicking thing that I have a reference for but isn't in the article is that prior to the episode before this, the model of the Stargazer in Picard's ready room was the model that would become Constellation-class. However, because they planned to re-use the Constitution-class model, during the previous episode and this episode, the model in the ready room is actually a Constitution-class ship, and not the same class of the Stargazer which would be inserted in post production. I just thought it was too trivia-ish to include. Miyagawa (talk) 11:59, 1 March 2013 (UTC)

Yeah, I'd think that would be trivia. If you really like, it might fit in "production." —Ed!^(talk) 14:06, 1 March 2013 (UTC)

Great work! Passing the GA now. —Ed!^(talk) 14:06, 1 March 2013 (UTC)

2003:E0:8F08:2593:E09D:1B0D:95AE:B3E7 (talk) 05:05, 20 August 2020 (UTC)

mon contraire, must you always be so temporal ethical - no - why is it about being superior

My fish, myself, my crew and the rock bottom ship. What is it you,re after.

You mustn’t find out for now - wherever that is with you mind bending accusations.

Karaoke in speech

- court case Picard against the low dim countiuum.