Talk:The Boat Race 1960/GA1

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Reviewer: Ritchie333 (talk · contribs) 17:33, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

There are still boat race articles to review? Oh, go on then....

Lead

• Is it worth saying it was Oxford's second win in a row, the only such time since the First World War, and that Princess Margaret attended? And maybe a brief summary of the race, such as the Grauniad's "most gallant finishing efforts"

  Have updated the lead a little. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

Background

• "and broadcast worldwide" - was this the case in 1960? I seem to recall transatlantic / worldwide broadcasts only really got underway in the late 60s (example)

  Updated a bit... The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

• "the first member of the British Royal Family to attend the Boat Race in forty years." (on image caption) - I couldn't find the claim for this, but noticed it was down the bottom. Anyway, I've added a Guardian citation to the caption which I assume is correct

  Thanks, my bad. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

Crews

• "The Cambridge crew, Beresford suggested, were" - suggest "Beresford suggested the Cambridge Crew were"

  Rephrased. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

• "Only one participant in this year's race was registered as non-British" - Have I got the wrong source here? This mentions three Harvard graduates

  Yep, that's for the 1961 race. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

  So, at the risk of being thick, what's a citation for the 1961 race doing in the 1960 race article? Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 18:07, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

  To cite " the former Harvard University captain"... The Rambling Man (talk) 18:10, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

  Got it. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 18:13, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

Race

• What's "a canvas-length lead"?

  The length of a canvas? Linked to the glossary. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

• "Oxford spurted at Harrods Furniture Depository" - I don't know if "spurted" is the right word but I thought of somebody spitting on Harrods - maybe "gained advantage" or "improved speed" - hmmm, not sure really

  Spurting or pushing are common descriptions of making a big effort to row harder. It's succinct. Your suggestions aren't really covering it. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

  Possibly it's because I've been listening to a documentary on Radio 4 about Page 3 in the background and "spurting" brought something else to mind. Anyway, I can't think of anything better, so "spurting it is" Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 18:05, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

  I agree. When I was doing it, we called it "making a push" or "pushing away from" something tangible, like a bridge or a landmark... The Rambling Man (talk) 18:07, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

• "As the Oxford cox P. J. Reynolds" - needs a comma after "cox" I think

  I disagree, but if you're adamant, feel free to add it in yourself....! The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

Summary

• That's it - on hold

  As ever, thanks for your review, much appreciated. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:57, 20 January 2015 (UTC)

  No problem. Passed. Ritchie333 ^{(talk) (cont)} 18:13, 20 January 2015 (UTC)