Talk:The Calusari/GA1
Latest comment: 12 years ago by TBrandley in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 16:44, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
- Infobox
- To match with other articles, link "2" in the infobox for season, then remove the episode lists at the very bottom of the infobox
- Lede
- "(stylized as "The Căluşari") is not mentioned/or expanded upon in the article ("Production"). Nor referenced
- Make a note that it was US airing by saying it is an "American science fiction" or, after Fox network say United States "Fox network in the United States."
- Only link Fox, not network
- Episode can't really "premiered" how about "originally aired"
- Done (although, premiered is a verb...).--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
- Link science fiction to science fiction on television. I think.
- "It premiered on the Fox network on April 14, 1995. It was written by Sara B. Charno and directed by Michael Vejar. The episode is a "Monster-of-the-Week" story, unconnected to the series' wider mythology, or fictional history." wack of run-on perhaps re-word to: , which originally aired on the Fox network on April 14, 1995. Written by Sara B. Charno, the episode is a "Monster-of-the-Week" story, unconnected to the series' wider mythology, or fictional history. Directed by Michael Vejar, [etc.].
- I fail to see how my original sentence is a run-on (a run-on means one long, poorly written sentence). Since mine is several, and you're suggesting a cosmetic re-write, I don't feel that it is necessary.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
- Link Nielsen household rating
- "The Calusari" received mixed reviews from television critics, with inconsistencies in the plot being cited as the main detractors." Re-write to: "The Calusari" received mixed reviews, with critics citing inconsistencies in the plot as the main detractors."
- Plot
- Mulder’s is curly aposthrate. It should be regular ('), as per MOS:PUNCT.
- "As police" → "As the police"
- grandmother’s is curly aposthrate. It should be regular ('), as per MOS:PUNCT.
- Production
- Add comma after Charno
- Commas should be used, in this case, two separate two sentences. Since these aren't two complete sentences, this shouldn't be there.
- Broadcast and reception
- Episode can "premiered" how about "originally aired"
- Only Fox should be linked
- "The Calusari" received mixed reviews from television critics, with inconsistencies in the plot being cited as the main detractors." Re-write to: "The Calusari" received mixed reviews, with critics citing inconsistencies in the plot as the main detractors."
- References
- Ref. 2: Link to "Fox Broadcasting Company", not "corporation"
- Ref. 6: "The X Files - The Calusari rated 18 by the BBFC" after The X-Files should be an en-dash, rather than a regular –, it should be – per WP:DASH
- Ref. 7 is not needed. It is just a search for Ref. 6
- It's actually to show that its the highest-rated of the series. Ref 6 does not show this data.
- Ref. 8: Doubled periods with Time, Inc., which should be Time, Inc
- External links
- "The X-Files Wiki, an external wiki". Repetitive. How about: "The X-Files, an external wiki"
Great work! TBrandley 17:07, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
- All have been addressed or my reasoning put down. Thank you!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)
- No problem. I'll pass. Congrats! TBrandley 19:21, 30 July 2012 (UTC)