Talk:The Compatibility Gene/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Chiswick Chap in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 19:56, 1 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:04, 2 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Comments

  • File:The Compatibility Gene cover.jpg needs the "n.a."s to be replaced with something suitable for fair use justification for those elements of NFCC.
    • Done, though actually the n.a. entries are created automatically for book covers to be used as primary identification by the file upload wizard. Maybe the rules have changed.
  • "professor Daniel M. Davis" context? nationality for instance?
    • Glossed.
  • "by Peter Medawar, and" again, context as he seems to have died about 30 years before this book.
    • Added date.
  • "immunology at Imperial College and" maybe worth context here too, it's now called Imperial College London (maybe not then of course) but the London may be helpful.
    • Added. I remember when it was called ICST ...
  • "from old questions " not really encyclopedic tone.
    • Edited.
  • "piece together" same.
    • Reworded.
  • "class I Human leucocyte" no need for capital H.
    • Fixed.
  • "having the allele for Huntington's" allele overlinked.
    • Fixed.
  • "killed by a natural killer cell." overlinked.
    • Fixed.
  • "in Britain by" in UK? or Great Britain? Britain seems a bit ... odd to my ear.
    • Fixed.
  • Avoid single-sentence paras of which you have two in a row...
    • Closed up.
  • "possibilities for personalised medicine, as when" overlinked.
    • Fixed.
  • Ref 3 v ref 5 work unlinked/linked.
    • Fixed.
  • Second external link, can that be incorporated or is it really of use?
    • Removed.

That's it for me. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 19:11, 4 October 2021 (UTC)Reply