Talk:The Compatibility Gene/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Chiswick Chap in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 19:56, 1 October 2021 (UTC)
- Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:04, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- File:The Compatibility Gene cover.jpg needs the "n.a."s to be replaced with something suitable for fair use justification for those elements of NFCC.
- Done, though actually the n.a. entries are created automatically for book covers to be used as primary identification by the file upload wizard. Maybe the rules have changed.
- "professor Daniel M. Davis" context? nationality for instance?
- Glossed.
- "by Peter Medawar, and" again, context as he seems to have died about 30 years before this book.
- Added date.
- "immunology at Imperial College and" maybe worth context here too, it's now called Imperial College London (maybe not then of course) but the London may be helpful.
- Added. I remember when it was called ICST ...
- "from old questions " not really encyclopedic tone.
- Edited.
- "piece together" same.
- Reworded.
- "class I Human leucocyte" no need for capital H.
- Fixed.
- "having the allele for Huntington's" allele overlinked.
- Fixed.
- "killed by a natural killer cell." overlinked.
- Fixed.
- "in Britain by" in UK? or Great Britain? Britain seems a bit ... odd to my ear.
- Fixed.
- Avoid single-sentence paras of which you have two in a row...
- Closed up.
- "possibilities for personalised medicine, as when" overlinked.
- Fixed.
- Ref 3 v ref 5 work unlinked/linked.
- Fixed.
- Second external link, can that be incorporated or is it really of use?
- Removed.
That's it for me. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 19:11, 4 October 2021 (UTC)
- Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 20:08, 4 October 2021 (UTC)