Talk:The Day We Died/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 14:19, 10 May 2012 (UTC)

• Intro: "our world" I feel "the prime universe" or "his universe" just fits better here. Not a biggie
• Intro: "It aired…" I would reiterate '"The Day We Died" aired' here
• Writing: "Despite the fact that the season finale might have been made the series finale, Pinkner and the other producers did not change what they had written in the script" I don't like the use of italics to emphasize here. I would just reword this section

Just minor nit-picking. This is a very good episode. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 22:44, 10 May 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! It's almost a good topic! About the series finale sentence, I don't know why I had such trouble writing it. I must have rephrased it about six times. Let me know if it still needs work. Thanks, Ruby 2010/2013 01:06, 11 May 2012 (UTC)

I think everything looks grand now. Passing. Congrats on the almost-good topic also! When you nominate it, I'll definitely throw my support in.--Gen. Quon (talk) 03:56, 11 May 2012 (UTC)

Thanks! Ruby 2010/2013 04:05, 11 May 2012 (UTC)