Talk:The Democratic Republic of the Congo and the World Bank

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 3 October 2018 and 15 December 2018. Further details are available on the course page. Peer reviewers: Daniel Carnahan.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 19:57, 17 January 2022 (UTC)

Improvements

Hello Nariaszu, my observations:

• The lede should summarize the article. As it stands, the lede has as much text as the rest of the article.
• Almost all of the references are from the World Bank and the IMF. The article needs references from the press.
• The article has no hypothesis, i.e. the WBG is important to the economy of DRC, the WBG has an outsize effect on the the economy of the DRC, the WBG doesn't do enough for DRG, or something. Then you need to find sources to support. If you find the opposite, then you need to change the lede.
• "investments surmounts to over 429 million" Surmounts"? 429 million what? - dollars, Euros, SDRs?

Best of luck. Rhadow (talk) 01:22, 3 December 2018 (UTC)

Comments

1. In terms of organization, the paragraph that follows Projects and Alliances could be broken down into smaller subparagraphs in order to break up the main ideas. 2. In the first paragraph, I would avoid the use of the phrase “war ridden” as it can be interpreted in various non-neutral ways. 3. In the first paragraph under Importance, the language seems unclear about what the controversy actually is about. 4. The last paragraph should be careful about the use of only one source. Not sure one critic warrants mention in the Wikipedia page. 5. Just a general improvement, I’d be careful about the amount of negative information regarding the current situation in the DRC. Maybe try to balance it with more redeeming or positive information and sources.

Daniel Carnahan102 (talk) 21:02, 7 December 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review

1. I like the amount of information in the first paragraph but I also believe you can break it up into different points and then go more in depth 2. Under Projects and Alliances, maybe talk more about the 29 Active projects, just so we can get an idea of what they are 3. Tag the IDA or the IFC that way if people don't know what they are they can be redirected and learn about those organizations as well 4. Under importance it is very brief and I would like to know more information 5. Add a picture of some sort, maybe a graph even to show whats going on within the Congo or where it is located Ashleyecorn (talk) 23:07, 7 December 2018 (UTC)ashleyecorn

Peer Review

Lead Section: You provided a really comprehensive lead section, which outlines the topic pretty well. Your outline provides an overview about the cooperation between the World Bank and the Democratic Republic of the Congo as well as a brief overview of the recent history of Congo.

Clear structure: Your structure is really clear and lucid. You could add some pictures in order to make the page more tangible. Beside this, I agree totally with the structure you have chosen.

Balanced coverage: Your page is really balanced and the length of your paragrphs represents their importance. I appreciate your introduction of your paragraph “project and alliances”. This gives a really good overview.

Neutral content: The language that you have used is objective and underlines the attempt to use a neutral point of view. Of course, the information one use tend always to represent one point of view. However, even your section “Importance” takes different views, which are supported by a wide range of sources.

Reliable Sources: The sources that you have used are reliable and from a wide range. Most of the sources are international institutions or reliable newspapers.

Fstammwi (talk) 16:53, 8 December 2018 (UTC) fstammwi@ucsd.edu (Florian Stammwitz)