Talk:The Doctor, the Widow and the Wardrobe/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 03:37, 11 August 2012 (UTC)

Let's read some Doctor Who! Awesome. Dibs! :) The article looks good, and I will do a full review later. Good work. TBrandley 03:38, 11 August 2012 (UTC)

Infobox

• 60 min should be 60 minutes
• Specials (2011-12) should use an en-dash, rather than a regular -, per WP:DASH

  ...I think I fixed this, correct me if I picked the wrong dash. Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Yep, you did. You got it done correctly. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

Lede

• "is an episode" which episode?

  It doesn't have a number in the series. Just a special. See Voyage of the Damned (Doctor Who). Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Understood. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• Link science fiction
• "in which the Doctor visits Earth and an alien forest" add actor for the Doctor there.

  That wasn't supposed to be there, I removed it. Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Makes sense. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• BBC One. In the United Kingdom?

  I think "British" covers this. Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Yeah, it's also like that on most X-Files articles. So, that's fine. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• "Christmas Day 2011" re the actual day it aired on, then note that it was Christmas 2011

  I reformatted the first paragraph based on "Voyage of the Damned" to avoid being too wordy. Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Okay. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• Unlink the doctor, and remove the actor as it should be linked and actor should be noted already above.

  See comment above. Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Okay. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• "He" makes it confusing. There are three people mentioned in the previous sentence, perhaps say "The doctor"
• "Cyril wanders through it first". Huh? Awkward.

  Changed to "but Cyril opens it before Christmas and wanders through". Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  That's very fine. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• "the UK". Write out fully to "United Kingdom".
• "Critical reception" to the episode?

  I made a minor change to your fix on the concern. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

Plot

• Prequel: 6 December? Which year?
• Prequel: Link The Doctor, and add the doctor's actor at the time
• Episode: Unlink the doctor, per the very above issue
• Episode: Add a comma after house, and before specially

  When reading it like that it adds an unnecessary pause. "Specially" is an adverb describing "prepared". Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Fair enough. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• Episode: Add actors for various characters in "Events"

  Did all except the wooden people - they aren't really actors in the same sense. Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Cool. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• Continuity: Is very small. Consider merging with another section, sub-section

  Moved to production. Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Great. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• Continuity: Add actor for the ninth doctor

  This doesn't quite seem right, as it's not referring to the character but rather the "era" - it's no different than saying "first season". Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Fair enough. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

Production

• "is directed by" to "was directed by"
• Linking in that image

  I removed it, if that's what you meant.

• In the second paragraph, consider paraphrasing. There seems to be too many quotes.

  Removed some that was just fluff. Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Okay. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• "The BBC" should be "The British Broadcasting Corporation (BBC)" as it is the first time has been mentioned. Then, also, link British Broadcasting Corporation. Per MOS:ACRO
• Casting: Link Doctor Who. It is the first time it was mentioned in the actual article.

  I think this kind of redundent. It's in the lead, infobox, and navboxes if someone really needs it. WP:OVERLINK says, "Generally, a link should appear only once in an article, but if helpful for readers, links may be repeated in infoboxes, tables, image captions, footnotes, and at the first occurrence after the lead." Glimmer721 ^talk 23:16, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Okay. I'll also make those changes to some of my articles, Say Hello to My Little Friend, Episode 14 (Twin Peaks), etc. Thanks, TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

Broadcast and reception

• Create sub-section for "Ratings"

  Some show's do this, some don't. It's sort of a personal preference. I kept consistent with the articles that had promoted before me. Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Okay. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• "Christmas Day 2011" write the actual day it aired on, then note that it was Christmas 2011
• "26th" of December?

  Changed to "26 December" 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• In the UK → In the United Kingdom

  Can't abbreviations be used after some time? Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• Critical reception: Add comma before "Telegraph"

References

• FN1: Don't shout in reference titles
• FN1: SFX is missing publisher (Future Publishing)
• FN2: BBC America is missing publisher (BBC Worldwide)
• FN3: Digital Spy is missing publisher (Nat Mags)
• FN4: Link BBC, since WP:OVERLINK doesn't apply to references, also, per WP:REPEATLINK
• FN4: Is missing publisher (The Crown)

  Is that necessary? I mean, it's not like the others. Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  I guess so. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• FN5: Link BBC, since WP:OVERLINK doesn't apply to references, also, per WP:REPEATLINK
• FN5: Is missing publisher (The Crown)
• FN6: SFX is missing publisher (Future Publishing)
• FN6: Link SFX
• FN6: Double quotes (") should be single quotes (') per WP:MOS guidelines
• FN6: SFX is missing publisher (Future Publishing)
• FN7: Is missing the publisher (Guardian Media Group)
• FN8: Link SFX
• FN8: Double quotes (") should be single quotes (') per WP:MOS guidelines
• FN8: SFX is missing publisher (Future Publishing)
• FN9: Link Metro
• FN9: Is missing publisher (Associated Newspapers)
• FN10: Link BBC
• FN10: Is missing publisher (The Crown)
• Various others are also missing publishers, and linking problems.

  Fixed two dead links. Did my best on the publishers. Not sure about using "The Crown" as it's not a larger publishing group (same with ABC and BARB), ref #22 is {{cite press release}} and will only accept one publisher and no work, Skegness Standard and The Forester don't have Wikipedia pages to link to and I'm not sure about the publisher (the former is the newspaper for Skegness, the latter says it's "an indpendent family-owned newspaper"), and Big Finish Productions is a private company. Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  Oh. I'll totally forget the write the dead links here. Thanks for fixing those issues up. TBrandley 23:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

• FN26: Can't see information. Can you make a note of where the information is?

External links

• The first link is missing quote marks

  It doesn't seem to be an option with the template. I'd fix it but I'm not good with templates. Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

  No worries. I got the issue, I just re-wrote the episode under the new parameter with quotations there.

• Put categories in alphabetical order

Great work! I'll put this on hold for now. TBrandley 20:45, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

Comments above, did everything unless I said I didn't. I'm starting school tomorrow and I'm not sure exactly how much I'll be able to edit; you may have to ask for a second opinion on some of my questions if I show no activity in my contributions. Now I'm off to finish The Ribos Operation and enjoy my last day of summer. Cheers! Glimmer721 ^talk 23:14, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

Cool. Its your last day of summer? I still got until September until I start school again, most likely because I'm in Canada. Those issues like fixed. I'll make some minor fixes, and then, pass the nomination. Great work. TBrandley 23:31, 12 August 2012 (UTC)

The article looks good. I'll pass it now. TBrandley 00:06, 13 August 2012 (UTC)

Thanks! Yeah, some areas of the US start really early. Glimmer721 ^talk 01:38, 13 August 2012 (UTC)