Talk:The Dragon's Call/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Midnightblueowl (talk · contribs) 20:41, 24 December 2012 (UTC)

Right, I'll give this one a go:

In the introduction:

• "the arrival of young Merlin (Colin Morgan)" – youth is in the eye of the beholder; perhaps use "young man" or something of that nature instead.
• No need to mention that the series is an origin story twice in the introduction; remove the former.
• "more well-known actors", change to "better-known actors" perhaps ?
  • I'm not quite sure "more better-known" would be grammatically correct. Glimmer721 ^talk 00:44, 25 December 2012 (UTC)
    • What I mean to say is that "better-known" should be used, not "more better-known". Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:23, 25 December 2012 (UTC)
• "making the talking dragon work", change to "creating the talking dragon".

Under "conception and development":

• "Looking back at "The Dragon's Call", Murphy and Capps felt that it had so much to introduce in terms of world and characters that there was not enough story.[6]" Could you clarify what you mean here?
  • Changed to "not enough of the main plot of the episode". Essentially, they said that the hardest thing and opening episode had to do was set up the characters and the world, and if they were being critical they felt that it did not have much of its own plot, or that the actual story wasn't in the forefront. I'm open to any other rewordings; it's sort of something hard to briefly explain. Glimmer721 ^talk 00:44, 25 December 2012 (UTC)

Under "casting":

• "a "big" but "ruthful"" – do you mean "truthful" ?

At this stage I have fixed everything. (I'm not sure if you are completely done with the review.) Anyway, many thanks for the review! Glimmer721 ^talk 00:44, 25 December 2012 (UTC)

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