Talk:The Feels (song)/GA1

Latest comment: 5 months ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Nominator: Lililolol (talk · contribs) 21:33, 1 February 2024 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 18:59, 26 May 2024 (UTC)Reply


  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):  
    b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a. (reference section):  
    b. (citations to reliable sources):  
    c. (OR):  
    d. (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a. (major aspects):  
    b. (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):  
    b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/fail:  

(Criteria marked   are unassessed)

I will do this today now!! --K. Peake 18:59, 26 May 2024 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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  • JYPE Studios → JYPE in the infobox per Template:Infobox song
  • Mention in the first sentence that it was "recorded for their third Korean studio album, Formula of Love: O+T=<3 (2021)." with the wikilink
  • The lead is quite short, so you could do with writing out the songwriters and producers in the background section and then it can be included here too
  • Remove pipe on groovy here per MOS:LINKSTYLE
  • Pipe synth to Synthesizer
  • "Its lyrics are about the protagonist's" → "The lyrics are about the protagonist's"
  • "best-of lists by" → "best-of lists by the likes of"
  • The chart position seem poorly laid out; not only should South Korea probably be first since that is where the group are from, but New Zealand is not notable when it is only a Hot Singles chart and why is the Netherlands position not mentioned when lower positions are? Also, change the UK to the United Kingdom
  • "went on to get certified Gold by" → "was certified gold by"
  • Remove the amount of units or streams each certification represents
  • "In Japan, it was certified Platinum by" → "In Japan, it was certified platinum by"

Background

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  • "Cry for Me" is not mentioned by the source – "What You Waiting For" is though, a song later mentioned in this section too
  • "on their first Japanese album," → "on the group's first Japanese album,"
  • Delete the 2018 Japanese film since this is not notable
  • The 10th EP's release is not sourced
  • "On August 23, JYP Entertainment" → "On August 23, 2021, JYP Entertainment"
  • Using this, I would add the group's comments about it being their first English single and they also mentioned a desired to communicate to audiences in the United States that is notable

Music and lyrics

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  • Audio sample looks good!
  • ""The Feels" is a" → "Musically, "The Feels" is a"
  • There is a drum that should be added in prose; maybe move the part after the genre and tempo of the current opening sentence to a new sentence and include this with that?
  • The first comma should be before group member rather than explained
  • "saying, "the song is about falling" → "saying, "The song is about falling"
  • Add the release years in brackets of "Like Ooh-Ahh" and "Cheer Up"
  • I think adding the refrain to this section would be worth it

Critical reception

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  • Retitle to Reception and merge commercial performance per that being one para
  • "received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
  • Add the release year of Eyes Wide Open
  • "that resembles "their early tracks"." → "that resembles the optimism of their earlier work."
  • Remove wikilink on NME at the list since they are linked at the start of this section
  • Mention the name of the NME and Rolling Stone reviewers who made these comments
  • Remove pipe on chorus
  • The year-end lists sentence is not needed when you already added enough in prose and the rest are displayed beneath

Commercial performance

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  • This should be a sub-section, below the rankings
  • The information feels disordered; I would move South Korea to first per it being their home country and the global streams and Global 200 to last since this is more of a finalization, as it is worldwide
  • You should mention along with the United States stats the position it entered the Billboard Hot 100 at
  • "peaked at number 3" → "peaked at number three" per MOS:NUM and Japan should be the second country since it is the closest to South Korea and then have the New Zealand, Malaysia, and Singapore positions
  • Add the Japanese certification in prose
  • "the group's second entry" → "becoming Twice's second entry"
  • You need a source for it being their first song to chart on the UK Singles Chart
  • "landed at no. 40" → "landed at number 40"
  • "received a Gold certification" → "received a gold certification" and mention this was in the US with the number of certified units signified

Release and promotion

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  • Move this to being the section before reception
  • Pre-orders are not showing as sourced, unless that is my Google translator's issue; if not sourced, please simply change to one sentence that mentions the release date they announced on September 3 too
  • If the single release date is not added in the above sentence, mention it in one afterwards please
  • "with a performance of" → "with performances of" although the Stephen Colbert one is not sourced and add that these performances were during 2021
  • Chaeyoung should not be wikilinked and the member writing these lyrics is unsourced

Music video

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Background

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  • Wikilink music video, although the director is not mentioned by the source
  • "on JYP Entertainment's official social media channels" → "on JYP Entertainment's official YouTube channel" per the source's video
  • "of the 1995 movie" → "of the 1995 film"
  • The last sentence reads repetitively; reword it to either stating they announced or teased their third Korean album and third tour at the end of the video

Synopsis and reception

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  • Img looks good!
  • Remove overly obvious wikilink on prom
  • ""deluxe wardrobe that the girls are hanging out in."" → ""deluxe wardrobe" that Twice appear in."
  • "Then it shows the members" → "Then, the video shows the members"
  • "on their evening."" → "on their evening"." per MOS:QUOTE
  • "The Twice members take a break..." the quote should end here and put this new sentence into your own words, per MOS:OVERQUOTE
  • Mention the poster ending scene that teases their next album and tour
  • Wikilink Rolling Stone India to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "included it in their list" → "included the music video in their list"
  • The visual losing to "Lalisa" is not sourced; either source this or only keep the mention of the nomination if not

Track listing

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  • Good

Credits and personnel

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  • Use Sub-headings instead of sub-sections
  • Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel
  • Engineer should only be linked on the first instance and keep as audio engineer link

Charts

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Weekly charts

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  • The Netherlands chart position is not sourced

Year-end charts

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  • Good

Certifications

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  • Good

Notes

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  • Good

References

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Final comments and verdict

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