Talk:The Girl with the Dragon Tattoo (2011 film)/GA1
Latest comment: 12 years ago by DAP388 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Bruce Campbell (talk · contribs) 07:16, 16 July 2012 (UTC)
I will be reviewing this article. Bruce Campbell (talk) 07:16, 16 July 2012 (UTC)
Lead
- Some of the lines in the lead are a little awkward, for example:
- A concerted effort by Sony Pictures Entertainment associates Michael Lynton and Amy Pascal to create the film started in 2009. It took the company a few months to obtain rights to the novel. -> Should either be "A concerted effort by Sony Pictures Entertainment associates Michael Lynton and Amy Pascal to create the film started in 2009, though it took the company a few months to obtain rights to the novel." or the second sentence should either be reworked or removed
- Done
- Lines like "They then recruited Zaillian and Fincher." and "The script took over six months to write." should be worked in more smoothly into the lead, the small sentences with only a few words is a bit awkward.
- Done
Synopsis
- I noticed that after every main character's name in the synopsis is followed with the actor that portrayed them, so try adding Mikael Blomkvist (Daniel Craig) and Lisbeth Salander (Rooney Mara) for additional clearance.
- Done
Filming
- The pose is fine but the paragraph is a big block of text with only reference supporting the entire thing. There's also several quotes, which all should be individually referenced. Could easily all be multi-referenced with the same reference or more could be added.
- I was originally concerned with that, but the copyeditor said that it would be over referencing, given that all of the info originates from the same sources. I did reference the quotes, however.
Title sequence
- Same issue here aswell. The pose is great but generally there's a lack of references.
- See above.
References
- Wikilink Box Office Mojo please.
- References 92, 93, 102 have their titles all in capitals. And while the titles on the references themselves are all capitalized, they're generally changed, for example; "AFI AWARDS 2011" -> "AFI Awards 2011".
- Done
After these slight corrections the article can be passed. Also, though this has no barring on the GA nomination itself, the accolades section is large enough to warrant a split. It would be fairly easy to slit the into a separate article and get a Featured List form that, ala List of accolades received by Black Swan, etc Bruce Campbell (talk) 02:41, 19 July 2012 (UTC)
- I believe I have addressed all of the issues. :) —DAP388 (talk) 04:03, 19 July 2012 (UTC)