Talk:The Good Dinosaur/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Chompy Ace in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 12:20, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 12:20, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
- Some Dude From North Carolina, Chompy Ace (which always accompanies your GA reviews) has fixed some issues. Can you re-revise them and strike the resolved issues? Meanwhile, I'll resolve issues I can see distinctly. GeraldWL 16:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
editNon-free use rationale for the poster is in good condition.Do Denise Ream and Mychael Danna need references?- Removed
- Cinematographers, however, do need sources.
- Does credits count as reliable?
The current reference being used says the runtime is 97 minutes; other sources disagree.- Changed
#Box_office mentions a source putting the budget at $200 million, so change $175 million to "$175–200 million" and add said source.Add commas after Frances McDormand and "November 10, 2015".The phrase "various American nature" sounds weird. Try rewording.- Redone.
"to the film" → "into the film"
Plot and voice cast
edit- Plot is under 700 words.
Velociraptor → Velociraptors (plural)- Done.
- Cast section looks good.
Production
editDevelopment
editRemove the comma after "film in 2009".- Add commas after "producer" and "November 27, 2013".
- Done the former. The latter would make it grammatically incorrect.
- The reference after "June 2011" is reciting this article, so I would cite that instead even though it's shorter.
- Done! Talk about a subtle discovery.
How do we know details were shared on August 20, 2011, when the article is from August 21?- No mention of "the 1964 New York World's Fair" or "Audio-Animatronics" in this reference.
- Seems done.
Revisions
edit- Remove the comma after "next month".
- Done.
- The first reference in this section doesn't mention Walker leaving due to "story problems".
Here, and in other sections, change "..." to "[...]" (more visually pleasing).- The sentence starting with "Peterson moved on" should be fully in past tense.
- Is it good now?
- A reference is needed for the sentence starting with "In September 2013".
- Seemingly done.
- was "the → was because "the
- Can't see that word.
That second paragraph is a big, partly unnecessary quote block, so try trimming it down a bit.The phrase "Arlo was a huge dinosaur" needs to be reworded.dismantled → "dismantled"The third paragraph contains another unnecessary quote block. Trim it.The last part of the sentence starting with "Arlo's three siblings" needs a source.What's up with these various quote blocks?! Trim the one in the final paragraph as well.
Design and setting
editIn the caption, replace "stunning" since it's not neutral.Main issue here is the appearance of more quote blocks.
Music
edit- This section looks good.
Video games
edit- Can this become a subsection at the end of #Release?
- Also, can this be turned into prose instead of a list?
- Done all.
Release
edit- Remove the comma after "accompany the film".
- A reference is needed for Party Central being shown with Muppets Most Wanted.
- Seems resolved all. GeraldWL 12:20, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
Reception
editBox office
edit- Add commas after "November 25, 2015" and the second use of Argentina.
- Done.
- The reference after "opening weekend" is missing an author.
- done.
- The second-to-last sentence in the second paragraph needs a source.
- Seems done?
- "$28.7" → "$29.8" (source being used)
- Done.
- The numbers on the sentence starting with "The top openings" does not match the numbers from the closest reference.
Critical response
edit- Wikilink Kenneth Turan, Manohla Dargis, Joe Morgenstern, Justin Chang, Christopher Orr (film critic), Mark Feeney, and Mark Kermode.
- The sentence ending with "wrote Justin Chang of Variety" does not sound Wikipedia-ish.
- Two of these have been cleared up. GeraldWL 12:15, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
Accolades
edit- Several award ceremonies are missing sources.
- I would suggest adding a references column per consistency with other GA-articles.
References
edit- /Film → /Film
- SlashFilm → /Film
- Already done Chompy Ace 02:35, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- Voice → The Village Voice
- Already done Chompy Ace 02:35, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- Den of Geek! → "Den of Geek"
- Collider.com → Collider
- Variety.com → Variety
- Already done Chompy Ace 02:37, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- The Los Angeles Times → Los Angeles Times
- The reference after "story first" is from The Guardian, not The Observer.
- The reference in #Accolades for the Golden Reel Awards should not be in all caps.
- Till here, done.
- I don't think "stitchkingdom.com"/"Stitch Kingdom", is a reliable source so I would find a replacement.
- Partly done the cast section says the note should be consistent with the sources. Chompy Ace 02:30, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- References should be properly cited and shouldn't include the Wayback Machine template.
- Will resolve these two later.
- Mark references from Los Angeles Times with the "|url-access=limited" parameter.
- Mark references from The Atlantic with the "|url-access=limited" parameter.
- Mark references from The New York Times with the "|url-access=limited" parameter.
- Mark references from The Washington Post with the "|url-access=limited" parameter.
- Till here, done.
- Mark references from South China Morning Post with the "|url-access=subscription" parameter.
- I don't see any SCMPs.
- Mark references from The Wall Street Journal with the "|url-access=subscription" parameter.
- Already done Chompy Ace 02:37, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
- In the reference in #Music after "directed by Peterson", remove "| Film Music Reporter" from the title and add the website parameter.
- Done.
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