Talk:The Good News Club: The Christian Right's Stealth Assault on America's Children/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 1TWO3Writer (talk · contribs) 02:55, 16 July 2023 (UTC)

This is my first GA review so if I get anything wrong, tell me.

Lead

Lead needs to be broken into two paragraphs, one for the info about the book, the other about the reception.

• Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:25, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

Author and background

Needs to be broken up into two, a separate paragraph for the author and the background.

• • Changed. Let me know if this is OK. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:27, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

When a GNC formed at the public elementary school her daughter attended, she investigated the club, which led to the beginning of the book.

Awkward sounding in my opinion. The commas make the sentence "jutter."

• • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:34, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

...in the alternative newspaper Santa Barbara Independent...

Because the Santa Barb. article states it's an alternative newspaper, it's unnecessary and/or perhaps even irrelevant to describe it as such here.

• • Can you explain more? Therapyisgood (talk) 01:35, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

Santa Barbara Independent already states it is an alternative newspaper, meaning repeating that fact is likely unnecessary. However, it's a minor issue, so I'll pass the article and leave it up to you. 123Writer ^talk 14:44, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

Overview

...between the ages of four to fourteen in elementary schools...

The wikilink to 4/14 could be placed around "four to fourteen" part, removing the need for the parentheses.

• • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:37, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

Paragraph break between "...about public education." and "The book consists..."

• • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:44, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

...worry that their children are being proselytized, ...

Should be "proselytized to" as it's a passive action.

• • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:44, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

...Manhattan in New York City...

Probably can do without the New York City part.

• • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:44, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

...their religion, Christianity...

Remove "their religion,".

• • Stewart focuses on peer-to-peer evangelism through which students can persuade other students to adopt their religion. is separate from the next part, "Christianity in high school sports, and organizations such as the Fellowship of Christian Athletes." I've added a comma for clarification. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:44, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

The final paragraph confused me. Does the author want to defund ALL public schools or only public schools that engage in evangelism? Also the quote "one of the largest and most successful collective efforts in [American] history" needs clarification: effort to do what?

• • Clarified the first part. Therapyisgood (talk) 02:30, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

Critical reception

Here's an additional review you may use.

• • That is Trotter's review, no? Therapyisgood (talk) 02:14, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

Apologies, it was a different link. 123Writer ^talk 14:41, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

This part needs to be organized better in my opinion. You should more clearly divide the reviews within sections, perhaps when the reviews talk positively or negatively about the work, or about the author's style.

Some review sources lack notability, for example The Humanist as it says in its article is only read by around 3k people. Journal of Education and Christian Belief also seems spotty in terms of notability. The reviewers are also just called by their names without credentials; why is Jeff Trotter's opinion so important?

• • I think The Humanist is OK, those statistics were from the late 1990s anyway and it's a trade publication in a sense that deals specifically with these issues. According to Similarweb it's getting 51.7k website visits per month. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:51, 19 July 2023 (UTC)
    • I added Trotter's credentials. Some reviewers already had credentials, such as John E. Tropman of the University of Michigan's School of Social Work. Therapyisgood (talk) 02:09, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

      That's fine. 123Writer ^talk 14:40, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

Minutiae

The caption on the image should not use a full-stop. Steward in references should be wikilinked at least once.

• • Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 01:45, 19 July 2023 (UTC)
    • Linked Stewart. Therapyisgood (talk) 02:41, 19 July 2023 (UTC)

Conclusion

I hope you find this review not overly harsh. Please feel free to ask me to clarify a few things if need be, I'm always happy to help.

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