Talk:The King of Fighters '99/GA1
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Nominator: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 22:05, 2 September 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: TeenAngels1234 (talk · contribs) 22:31, 6 September 2024 (UTC)
I'll review this. Stay tuned.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 22:31, 6 September 2024 (UTC)
Sorry for the extreme delay.
- "he trying to spread new content". Is trying the best consecutio temporum here? Maybe tried is better? I'm just asking, since English technically is not my first language.
- Reworded
- "The characters were decided within the team". What do you mean with this?
- Done
- "With the Strikes, SNK aimed to give the player idea for new combos". As the first point: is ideas better?
- Reworded
- "He thought that there will be some things that will come up, but he was still worried". Again, isn't a better consecutio temporum for the part in italics?
- Done
- "Ono still had worries about how the game would be received". Quite trivial. Every artist has worries about how their art will be received, I guess.
- Done
- I would suggest to remove the heavy use of passive voice for Release. X published, X released, X wrote, are better than X was published, X was released, and so on.
- Done.
@Tintor2:That's all for now. The lead, the plot/characters and the gameplay sections look good to me. I only need to read Reception.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 20:00, 22 September 2024 (UTC) @TeenAngels1234: Thanks for the notes. Revised everything.Tintor2 (talk) 21:03, 22 September 2024 (UTC)
Okay. I read again the article and I have just some doubts:
- "...also called "KOF '99"". Why the ""?
- Removed
- "..mysterious yet threatening organization known only as NESTS". Yet and only sound superflous.
- Revised
- " King joins forces with Blue Mary (formerly a member of the "'97 Special Team") to form the new Women Fighters Team with Kasumi Todoh (last seen in KOF '96) and Li Xiangfei (from Real Bout Fatal Fury 2: The Newcomers)". Can you remove the parentheses and rewrite this in a more fluent way?
- Revised
- "The same issue would happe in the third story arc where Kyo and Iori". Is happe a typo, right? Also, I would add a comma after arc.
- Revised
- "...regarding Kyo Kusanagi's design was one.." Maybe "as one" is better?
- Revised
- "Both Uvejuegos stated". Why both?
- Revised
- " Gaming Age felt the graphic update was more noticeable than the Uvejuegos did but was critical of Krizalid". Can you rewrite this? I can't understand that "than the Uvejuegos did".
- Done.
@Tintor2: That's all.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 19:07, 26 September 2024 (UTC) @TeenAngels1234: Revised everything. Thanks for the review.Tintor2 (talk) 19:32, 26 September 2024 (UTC)
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- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Okay, so. The editor briefly fixed all the doubts. Passing.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 18:31, 27 September 2024 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail: