Talk:The Love Club EP/GA1
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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 11:29, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
Happy to offer a review.
- "Spotted" is a little informal. I'd also rather see more about the EP itself in the opening lines before you talk about Lorde's signing
- Changed to "discovered". Simon (talk) 14:16, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- "and within three weeks, the pair co-wrote and produced all of the songs for the EP" Tense. How about "and within three weeks, the pair had co-written and produced all of the songs for the EP"
- Done. Simon (talk) 14:16, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- "well received" should be "well-received"
- Done. Simon (talk) 14:16, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- "in those two countries, respectively" I'm not sure the comma is needed
- Removed the comma. Simon (talk) 14:16, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- "and sold 60,000 copies by August 2013" Again, that should be "had sold"
- Changed to "have sold". Simon (talk) 14:16, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- "yet criticised its "bullshit" references to "expensive alcohol, beautiful clothes and beautiful cars"." I'm not clear what the "it" refers to, here.
- Changed to "their", which refers "hip hop-influenced artists". Simon (talk) 14:16, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- "Lyrically inspired by Kanye West's "Dark Fantasy"" That's not what the cited source says.
- Fixed. Simon (talk) 14:16, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- "In the United Kingdom, Virgin Records released a 10-inch vinyl edition on 10 June 2013." Was that the only release in the UK?
- I am quite sure that it is. Simon (talk) 14:16, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- I'm not clear on what all the details about the performances really have to do with the EP? Some of them are promotional, but others don't seem to belong here?
- I am not sure what "others" are here. Simon (talk) 14:16, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- "AllMusic called the album" Personification. A particular writer called it that, not Allmusic.
- Fixed to "an editor of AllMusic". Simon (talk) 14:16, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- "noted Lorde as" How about "characterised Lorde as"?
- Done. Simon (talk) 14:16, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- "At the 2013 New Zealand Music Awards, The Love Club EP and "Royals" won the awards for Breakthrough Artist of the Year and Single of the Year, respectively." Lorde won the breakthrough award, surely? She may have won it for the EP, but that's different from the EP winning it.
- Fixed. Simon (talk) 11:27, 10 November 2014 (UTC)
- "At the World Music Awards the EP was nominated for Best Album.[41]" Comma needed after "Awards", and could you tell us who won?
- Added. Simon (talk) 11:27, 10 November 2014 (UTC)
- The year-end charts should be mentioned in the reception section (which should probably be named "reception and performance")
- I have added the year-end charts but for the title. I think "Reception" has already covered the whole section. Simon (talk) 11:42, 10 November 2014 (UTC)
- Could we have a sourced mention of the Fffrrannno Remix in the main article?
- I have found but I could not find any suitable sources. Simon (talk) 11:27, 10 November 2014 (UTC)
Sources are good and appropriate. Image and sample are OK, but the rationale on the sample could probably be a little better.
Here are some more reviews you could cite given that the article's currently quite short. Also, take a look at this article.
- "Lorde debut EP hints at big things in store". Manawatu Standard. 24 April 2013. p. 12.
Rating: 4/5
- This mini-album contains pop songs that meld together electronic elements and the distinctive voice of Ella Yelich-O'Connor, a Takapuna Grammar High School student whose alter ego is Lorde. Signed to Universal records, she has already had her song Royals reach the top of the New Zealand singles charts and has a strong online following through her Facebook and Twitter pages.
- Releasing a mini-album as a debut is a significantly easier task than a full-length album, writing and recording five quality tracks that show variety is much less time- consuming than 10 tracks. Yelich- O'Connor is also working through the International Baccalaureate programme and intends to finish her schooling; her music is what she does in her spare time and during the school holidays.
- Unlike many current pop performers Yelich-O'Connor wrote all the songs on her debut, and while the studio production is slick and world-class, it doesn't overshadow her talent for penning memorable pop melodies and interesting lyrics. The best is her single Royals. It shares similarities with some of Gwen Stefani's latter work, the simple repetitive chant-style verses leading into strongly melodic choruses.
- Lorde's debut is everything that a good pop debut should be - modern production, good songwriting, well performed and with just the right edge to appeal to a mainstream audience. While Yelich- O'Connor is young, her writing is mature, sensitive and shows an awareness of the world that belies her years. She is a New Zealand performer who has the possibility of worldwide appeal.
- Cardy, Tom (12 April 2013). "Today's album". The Dominion Post. p. 10.
- We rarely review EPs, but it's been hard to ignore the five-track The Love Club EP from the newest Kiwi pop star Lorde. This week it's No 3 on the charts, while single Royals is at No 2. What surprised me about Lorde was learning that she's 16-year-old North Shore resident Ella Yelich- O'Connor. Before then I thought she was American. The reason is that there's nothing distinctly Kiwi about her sound and her singing accent on Royals is television American and similar to Lana Del Rey's. But that isn't a criticism. Neither is the fact that much on The Love Club by Lorde sounds like other contemporary left-field pop artists. Million Dollar Bills could have been recorded by Grimes - so no real surprise that Grimes has been praising her. On Bravado, Biting Down and the title track she's reminiscent of both Florence Welch and Marina Diamandis. But ultimately it doesn't matter because these are five sharp, refreshing and smart pop songs. Arguably the best I've heard by any Kiwi so far this year. The fact they've been written and performed by a 16-year-old is simply incredible
- @J Milburn: Thank you so much for those three precious reviews! I have addressed all of your concerns. Simon (talk) 11:42, 10 November 2014 (UTC)
Ok, I'm going to go ahead and promote now. I am left wondering if there may be other chart appearances out there, and I'm still uncertain about some of the listed performances- are they really relevant? Finally, there are still a few places where the text doesn't flow as well as it could. These are mostly nitpicks, and I do feel that this is now ready for GA status. J Milburn (talk) 19:49, 18 November 2014 (UTC)