Talk:The Madness of King Scar/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 21:35, 4 September 2017 (UTC)

Soon... Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:35, 4 September 2017 (UTC)

• Thank you! I am looking forward to your review. Aoba47 (talk) 21:53, 4 September 2017 (UTC)

Lead

• decision to exclude the song was reached due to its → decision to exclude the song was based on its

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

• portraying Scar, and it was also put on the records → start a new sentence here

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

Infobox

• Flawless ;)

• Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

Background

• by the original members: Heather Headley → you don't need the ":" here

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

• Somewhere in the first paragraph, you should add that the song was released on January 1, 1997 along with a source

• Not sure how I forgot that. I added that the song was recorded and released for the official cast album on that date and used the iTunes source as support for that. However, I think that it is best to include this information in the third paragraph and the first and second ones are more focused on either the creation/writing of the song or how part of it originated from a cut song for the film. Hope that makes sense. Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

Context and composition

• I really found no issue here

• Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

Reception and impact

• in which he hides". However, Scherb noted that the → hides", but noted that the...

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

• writing that he had initially believe → ...believed

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

• Olivia van der Will → Just state "Van der Will" as you have mentioned her before

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

• animation was: "seriously → you don't need ":" here

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

Other stuff

Copy-violation

• 22.5% is acceptable!

• Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

References

• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article (I can't verify the books, so I trust you with this!)

• Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

Outcome

• The article was GA even before I reviewed it. I think you are one of the best writers that I have seen on Wikipedia until now. Proudly putting this  On hold for 7 days. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 09:06, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

• @Cartoon network freak: Thank you for taking the time to review this article. I enjoyed researching and writing this, as it is cool to do something on a Disney song that was written for the stage production and not featured in the film version at all. Thank you for your compliments. I am very flattered and honored. I greatly appreciate working with you, and you are also a wonderful contributor on here. Have a great day! Aoba47 (talk) 14:50, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

• Gladly passing! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 16:00, 6 September 2017 (UTC)

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