Talk:The Moth (Lost)

GA Review

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Reviewer: BenLinus1214 (talk · contribs) 21:29, 9 May 2015 (UTC)

Hello again. Give me a couple hours to read this article. BenLinus1214^talk 21:29, 9 May 2015 (UTC) @Newyorkadam: Comments

• I feel that the plot summary is a bit too long. Are there any details that you feel that you could cut out? It's clocking in at 863 words currently, and per WP:TVPLOT, plot summaries should be around 200 to 500 words. It's okay if it's a bit over that word count, but the bottom line is that it needs to be shorter.
• Once again, for the caption in the production section, you need a period.

Y

• The second "Production" paragraph is too long and hard to navigate. Perhaps you could split it somewhere?

Let me know how that looks.

• Is the entire second paragraph sourced to those three footnotes? If so, then it's probably a good idea to ref name those footnotes and place them throughout the paragraph. In particular, I think it would be a good idea for you to source direct quotes. It's a bit jarring when these quotes don't have a ref at the end of them, and it makes them look unsourced.

Y

• Your reference to "Pilot" in the reception section does not have an end quote.

Y

• You usually add something about the Los Angeles Times list of Lost episodes. Where is that in this article?

Added.

If you can clean this stuff up, then I'll pass it. :) BenLinus1214^talk 00:27, 10 May 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, I'll cut down the plot summary shortly. -Newyorkadam (talk) 15:47, 12 May 2015 (UTC)Newyorkadam

@Benlinus1214: I cut down the plot a bit— lemme know how that looks. Newyorkadam (talk) 15:47, 18 May 2015 (UTC)Newyorkadam

@Newyorkadam: That's good enough, but in future episode articles, keep it to a bit shorter length. The next two episodes look pretty good in that regard, and I'll review those two soon. Pass. BenLinus1214^talk 23:09, 18 May 2015 (UTC)

@Benlinus1214: Thanks! I'll look into cutting those down a bit soon. -Newyorkadam (talk) 01:14, 19 May 2015 (UTC)Newyorkadam

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